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| RaiderTKD 2007-11-26 ch 1, | abuseAww... How cute! I loved how simple the moment may have seemed, but it showed how close Saki and Uo really are. I adore stories focusing on the less featured details of the show, and this was beautifully written. Good work, keep it up. ^^ |
| JacklynK 2007-06-13 ch 1, | abuseThese are adorable, my friend. I know I'm probably in the process of giving your ego an overdose today, but I can't keep quiet. I admit I may be a little egotisical myself, and am seeing a reflection of something resembling old times, but I really like this story. It feels real. Just the way they speak has that same endless comfort that seems to be inherent in Fruits Basket. Love ya. -J |
| Astronomy Geek 2007-05-01 ch 1, | abusethat was so cute! i'm a chocolate fantic too :) |
| Hoppy-chan 2006-10-27 ch 1, | abuseHeh. Hana's disdain for coconut made me giggle. Or it could just be the sleep-loss. Take your pick. This whole thing was fun, though. She certainly can be vague when she wants to. Year-old Valentine's day hearts, hm? Eckle. I hope your stomach was able to, er, stomach it. ~Naolin |
| Tylec Asroc 2006-09-11 ch 1, | abuseYour style is rich as chocolate - the pacing is leisurely slow, and every little moment between the two friends is relished with a sensual detail: the chocolate between their teeth, on their tongues - every motion is slow to emphasize this blissful little moment of relaxation. Sounds like the Prince and the Cat aren't the only ones hoping to command an uprising. |
| Nara Merald 2006-04-13 ch 1, | abusevery nice! In character. I could definately picture this happening! |
| Princess Lightina 2006-03-17 ch 1, | abuseNicely done! Again, not often that we see little stories dealing with Arisa and Hana as the main characters. I feel you portrayed the two very well and gave us just that much more insight to them to really make the three dimensional. Excellent job! Eraya ^_~ |
| Lalaith Yamainu 2006-02-20 ch 1, | abuselol, woot! very funny and amoosing! Amoosing, amoosing! |
| Sessha 2005-12-05 ch 1, anon. | abuseThat was deliciously nice. Continue along this line of story please. |
| cryptic.kitsune 2005-10-12 ch 1, | abuseVery cute...if not decisive in the least. I like your writing style, you have a certain finesse that many writers of fanfiction lack. |
| Reformed And Gone. 2005-07-21 ch 1, | abuseVery, very cute. And, of course, since I'm a Hana/Uo fanatic, I can read things into things that aren't really there. If that made any sense. I think you've captured the closeness of their relationship fantastically well, and I found their exchange quite entertaining. Nicely done. I do sense some Uo/Hana undertones in this, so I think I will place this in my C2. Sorry if you don't see the undertones. Heh... |
| Ashi-chan 2004-07-20 ch 1, | abuseJust like the chocolate, very sweet. I love the simplicity, but also how it shows how close Saki and Arisa really are. Quite humorous as well. Again, nice work on matching their personalities. The only thing I think could use improvement is placement of commas. Like when Hana says "Yes, Arisa?" or Uo starts out with "Hey, Hana..." But that's all I found mistake-wise. Anyway, I enjoyed this very much. ΓΈ Ashi-chan |
| Mercedes no Inuarai 2004-02-22 ch 1, | abuse*L* Hana has it right, neither Kyou nor Yuki will be getting a revolution soon in this "fight". Tohru loves them both equally in my opinion... . Cute fic. One thing, though... Shouldn't it be Valentine's Day? That's when the chocolate thing happened. Unless they saved all that chocolate for a month before eating it. ^_^ |
| Mia 2004-02-21 ch 1, anon. | abuseI luv saki :) |