As has already been said, you've failed to make it seem like they're boys. They still act far too girlishly at some times. You need to work on better defining them as MALE. No more eeps or ewws. Those don't really fit into the average male vocabulary.

Further, your typing is abysmal. Sometimes it is almost impossible to determine what you are trying to say. Spelling errors, a seeming inability to use contractions, and sometimes words that just don't belong. At one point Brittany says "I not" as if she meant to say "I know" but I can't even imagine how that change or mistake takes place.

Further, I would like to see a different format. Like, an actual story, not a script.

Also, there are time when you change tenses in the middle of a sentence. You need to work on making your writing more consistent and comprehensible. As it is, I was barely able to skim through this because it is honestly painful to read due to typing errors.

I feel that the author isn't really seeing these characters as "gender-switched". Throughout the story, Darian and Quentin seem to be acting more like girls than boys. Every time Quentin says "Eww!" I see the girl we know, not the boy we're supposed to be imagining. And I don't think it's possible for Darian not to have SOME attraction for Brittany - show me the adolescent male who isn't even a little bit drawn to large breasts and blonde hair in a cheerleading uniform, and I'll show you a homosexual.
I suggest the author bear one thing first and foremost in mind when writing this series of stories. Darian and Quentin are BOYS. They are MALE. That will color every aspect of their thinking, the way in which they relate to people, the childhood experiences they've had. For instance, I would imagine that Darian has been beaten up by his peers before - this would affect how he deals with the danger Kevin poses. And Quentin's concern with popularity will come from the male perspective, which means he won't do things like suggest reading Cosmopolitan magazine. A rumor that one is homosexual is social death in high school, and Quentin would know this and act accordingly. Actually, I came away from this story with the strong suspicion that he IS gay.
Oddly, while Darian and Quentin seem to act too much like their female counterparts, other characters seem rather off. Since when is Brittany a racist? And in the original episode, I don't recall Kevin getting on Upchuck's case about working with Brittany. Why is he so paranoid about a geek like Darian stealing her away? And I just don't see him asking Quentin to serve him - Kevin would see Quentin as an equal peer and would probably invite him to sit down and watch football. He asks GIRLS to wait on him, becase he is a sexist pig.
The only one I'm really seeing in his role properly is Upchuck. It's interesting to see him relating to another male rather than the female characters. It's a side of him we rarely (if ever) got to see on the show, and it's pulled off believably in this story. I do think, however, that Darian would get pretty tired of him after a short while, and their friendship wouldn't last very long.
One more thing - all these characters are talking like Commander Data. People use contractions when they speak!

Was that a speech from Yes Minister that Darian gave kevin?
I like this. English could use some work - do you need a beta? - but the story is interesting. You could do to break away from the word for word retelling tho.