Highly emotional. It was rather good. And I do think the Vice-Captain is Pelize.. but my memory has left me at the moment. But I'm pretty sure it was Pelize. It did get to a point and I do think you should continue. And if you want you can e-mail me sometimes if you have ideas telling them to people may help you in the long run.

Aww, I really liked this one, it's one of the very VERY rare fics out there that can contain nature od sensitivity between Percival and Chris without going overboard EXCELLENT job! *add to favorite stories* You should write more you know, I'd like the read more of your material, I like the style you put this in alot.

HEY! keep up the good work!

I liked this. ^^ It's a good perspective on Percival. I wish to read more of your work soon. ^_-

The dialogue in this story is very natural, and you seem to have captured Chris and Percival quite well. The descriptions are well done and not at all over the top.
I would suggest removing Chris's armor before she gets to the dock. Wouldn't want that shiny stuff to get crusted in sea salt! (Plus, it just looks so uncomfortable!)
One other thing...I think something is missing here: Leo can be a pig and let’s face it, not a lot of people upstairs most of the time
Bottom line: Good work and I look forward to more from you.
As far as writing a romance, that's up to you, really. That said, I believe that if Chris were to become involved with any of her knights, it would be Percy.