Hehehe yay, it's Alley! *waves* And whoever that green OC was, I'm interested already!

The plot doesn't really seem to go anywhere, but it'd be a great lead-in if something were to happen later that brought this dream into play. It's just... nothing has changed as a result of the happenings of the story. No one has grown or really learned anything, and everything's basically the same as it was before the story began. He just had a dream. If that dream were to be a beginning of something bigger that *would* change things, though, it could be a great prologue to a longer story.

Good job of portraying emotions and experiences in the little snapshot we did see, though. The bit at the end from the perspective of someone who has no idea what's going on was a nice touch.

When I first reviewed this, I didn't know what a one shot was. Now that I do and I've read your subsequent work, you've come a long way!

Good story, nice one-shot.

Wow I just love it! It's definately a kinda different fic, very cool! The whole story is very awesome. I really hope that you write more Skies fanfiction :)

I'll try to be nice, but don't expect any miracles.
What is with all the hyphens? Is there something wrong with your computer or something? All of the little dashes around here make this fic hard to read. It's also missing something, but I can't quite put my finger on it... Oh yes! A POINT! Vyse has a dream and, and-well that's it? (Please note my proper use of hyphens and learn from it.) You could have made this deep or funny or at least marginally entertaining, but you didn't. Here's hoping your next SoA fic is good.

Mwehe! Very good! Woot! I can't say anything else...
I'm not all here today. o_o
There isn't anything you should change. I think you should make a series fanfic though! :D But it'd take time...and research... O_o EEp...

This looks interesting. Release another chapter soon!

Nice, I like all the decriptions, rather vivid. It's a good start, though I'm a little confused as to where you are in the Skies storyline with Drachma and all...
And as far as using characters from other stories, I do that all the time only from RPing experiences. It really helps to use old characters when developing a character actually...