Oy...is it really necessary for every original character in Digimon to come from America? I mean *really*?

And really, those paragraphs need breaking down.

And I kinda have trouble believing that Tai would suddenly allow this girl to join them after she threatened to kill them just because Joe said so. Even if he did have doubts later on, he seemed too welcoming. Plus, when he trie to tell her she can't join them he says she's really nice? I must have missed the really nice part amongst all the 'I'm going to kill you' stuff...

In fact, if Joe had been friends with her, I would have thought he'd be more surprised about the way she was acting.

And why on earth do all the kids *except* Eva suddenly start fighting? I know they've had their fallings out here and there but this is getting to be out of character...

Stopped reading after the first... Well, it wasn't a paragraph. Don't know what it was. *chokes on gum*

*Shivers* My eyes hurt! Gaw! Fix the text blob! Fix the spelling! Fix the characters!

Kind of outta character. But still pretty good. I didn't read the whole thing.

Sup yo? Dude, your story rulz, hey and all you peeps yellin at her 4 not makin paragraphs, back off! Anywayz, keep up the good work, can't wait till part 4, peace out yo!

*Gabu*

That was more than a little confusing. I thought Eva was evil. And sense when does Joe call anyone babe? Anyway what's next? And have you ever heard of paragraphs? The help to make a story readable.

Hilarious! i wrote my own story but this one is much better! i recomend this to everyone!

Lookin' good, gurl! _

why are the digidestined taking this girl seriously. They allready know she's psyco (but then again who am i to talk) and wants to turn them over to the evil guys and controll their digimon. After she says all this they want her to join them? Well anyway about the paragraph thing. You start a new paragraph every time somebody new talks. If you are using a txt file you need to put two spaces inbetween or it won't register at all. You allready seem to understand about changing it for major scene changes. Good luck