hahahahaha, I love it! Don't get the whole "At least she hadn't said anything about the hair" part, though. Dark hair? Hm. *puzzled frown*

Gojyo blushing?? Aw.

Oh, I like, very clever.

¡a mí me gusta mucho tu cuento!
excelente!
¡escriba más cuentos de saiyuki, por favor!

Awesome descriptions! Especially at the beginning. You start to get a little hazy when Gojyo gets home though. I think you could have taken it a step farther. I really liked it though!

kind of reminds me of comics that I used to read when I was a teen. I never understood anything, but I felt like I was there.