aaw! so sad!_"

A very interesting story. There's just one problem. B'Elanna's father is John. Carl is his brother. Still, nice work.

Very good story! You describe Tom's feelings very well. And that he let Chakotay make this promise. sounds just like him.

One critique: I thought B'Elanna and Chakotay never had a romantic relationship. She has a crush on him (can I say so? Don't know if it's good english), but he never returned her feelings in this way.

Somebody already told you that the name from B'Elanna's father is John, not Carl, right?

waaaahhhh...

That was good! It didn't end quite that way, but I liked it!

Whoooh, and then...

Just so you know,

Carl Torres is B'Elanna's Uncle, John is her father.

Good concept!

wow. that was ... really good.

...lineage? What's Lineage? Is it a new episode? I thought the next one was Shattered. Hmmm...ah, well, I'm behind.

Cool! Taht was very deep adn really, really good.

aww, so sad! Poor Tom.