wow, your story is amazing!
it has so many different things in it but it works so well and the sorting hat's song was so cool!

hey,
great story. i really like the plot and the way you write.
but it isn't complete yet?

I know you've discontinued this story but I'd like to say it is very well written.

I going to put it on my story alert list just in case you decide to update

Omg! This is so good! I wish you would finish this!!
Why'd you stop?

love this fic. It's my third time reading it and I look forward to the rewrite of it. When Hermione went to Possett's, you should say onslaught (spelling?), not "on slaughter". Keep writing.

I was gunna wait to the end of teh sotry so far but


AAHAHAHAHA RONS DREAMING OF POTATOES! ! ! !


Voldemort has a daughter... i skipped a chapter, maybe i should reread it... ops:D


Good so far

Can you please work on this story again? i'd like to see what the outcome will be!

Oh, you REALLY should continue this! I know it has been a long time, but I like this. It's very cleverly written and the riddles that are in, aren't too easy.

And besides, I'm so curious which one is the spy for Voldemort; Luna or Ginny? I'd hope Ginny cause I don't like her, but more evidence are pointing to Luna thought. Too bad, she really nice.

And I must say, I do love protective!Oliver.. Ah...

-BTLF

You haven't updated in, like, 6 MONTHS! PLEASE, I NEED TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NEXT!

Your writing is very good—you have good sentence structure and really do seem to have a way with words.

However, we now come to the bad part, for you have turned Hermione into a Sue who REEKS of self-insertion. You have taken a girl who by all accounts already possessed the potential for beauty (Yule Ball, anyone?) and made her slimmer, taller and more beautiful. While this in and of itself could be acceptable, her Sue-status was solidified when you wrote this:
“You mean Hermione?” he asked. The twins jaws dropped, and Ron and Ginny, who had been right behind them, stared.

Apparently it wasn’t enough for Hermione to be pretty (which she already was). No, she must be so beautiful that everyone is literally spellbound by her looks. This, combined with her imagined ‘flaws’ (a flat voice), makes me think that you merely turned Hermione into what you would like to be physically. My guess is also that she shares the aforementioned flaw with you and that you think this flaw is enough to humanize her. It isn’t.

Furthermore, a brief scanning of the chapter titles is enough to tell me that this fic will most likely culminate in or contain a Hermione/Oliver relationship. This furthers my belief that this is a self-insertion; far too many authors thought that Movie!Wood was teh hawtness and consequentially wrote Oliver/Sue fics. I suspect that you are among this number.

Adding to this illusion are a few little mistakes; in the first chapter, for instance, you spelled Quidditch, quiditch. I have no way of knowing whether or not this is true, but mistakes like that give your fic the appearance that you don’t even care about the books (that is, if one hasn’t already gotten that impression from your sue-ification of Hermione).

You really are a very talented writer and I sincerely hope that in the future you will give yourself much better subject material. In the meantime, please at least consider what I have told you.

oh, update please!

loved it
update soon

i love that last line! I love the whole story but that line was just kinda funny!

wow! I can't wait for more!

right! REALLY GOOD!