Where is the first chapter? and how do you expect us to read this if we don't know what's going on? I'd really like to read this, but I'm confused. Help!! :)

Lady Mage

hey has a good plot but has some spelling mistakes that should be fixed.

cya carlie

so...

I was just about to read this story, but I was wondering, is there a first chapter out there or is this meant to be read from the second chapter?

just curious...

I love Tamora Pierce's books. I think this FF is going to be great!

FLUFF!U ROCK! im a fluff freak so sue me!:P

Yay a sequel!

WHERE IS THE SEQEL U PROMISIED US?! I DIEING OVER HERE!

SWET! CAN'T WAIT FOR THE SEQUL!

I would like it, but it's...well, implausible, I think. There wouldn't be so much woman who want to become warriors, if Alanna hadn't become a knight and if there hadn't been Queen Thayet. But that's just my opinion

I don't think I'm going to regularly review this, but in the second paragraph, when you said that Thom had grown two heads? Yeah, I thought that you meant he had literally grown two heads instead of two heads in height. If you want to, you could change that because I found it confusing as to why a two headed guy would be stunning.

i love it! keep up the good work

they lost ur 11th chapter. good story

great story!
Wrapped, not rapped. w/out the W the word has a totally different meaning. u forgot the w on that word at the beginning and end of this chptr.
if they just jumped on alanna why does her bro still have his arm around rabe? it's a nice touch but you might want to mention them pulling back.

that was an awsome ending plz write many more stories i really enjoyed this one thankx so much AJ

I like it, but the Black God is not bad, he is simply in charge of hte people who die. Roger does not worship and Gods remmeber? He says that he belives in them, but since they do not like him he does not worship them. I think that you also might want to make things seem a little less, well modern, with the yas and the, well, just modern stuff. Thanks for writing this story, i really like the plot.
Elyne