Hm, this is really is an interesting story, thought out--planned out really well--and great writing. I've spied a few mis-spell errors, maybe a tiny bit of grammer mistakes, but this was really great, great job on reeling this story out!

Seto Kaiba is a hard man to write out, with his personality and all, but you've nailed so well, I seriously thought that I was watching this all unfold--very realistic.

Over all, this is going into my favourites, why, because this is a great story; and I hope that once I read "The Obsession", it'll be just as good as this one!

This is really fantastic! I like Ari; she reminds me of Buffy Summers, the title character from the TV series Buffy the Vampire Slayer (except without Ari being a Slayer and Kaiba being a vampire). And, I can see a little bit of myself in her as well. Plus, Kaiba is IC the whole time, and he really cares for Ari too. That's pretty neat! :)
Keep up your super-creative, awesome writing! :)

Hi. This is going to be a DAMN long review. Okay? :D

The Possession - absolute classic. Never did you write anything that seemed off or rushed. I’ve seen so many KaibaOC fics it takes me 3 seconds to scan the first chapter for certain clues to know if it’s going to have potential and trust me, most of them are self indulgent crap. But of course, this is a real story. I seriously have so much to say I gotta break it down.

Ari – seriously, not a Mary-Sue. But I won’t stop here. I’ve seen other OCs that aren’t sues – they have flaws and such, just like Ari – they have a temper and different sides that make them human. But the way they are woven into the story, their relationships with Seto, they aren’t as real as it is here. I’ve also read a story in which the OC was more interesting than Kaiba (no matter how well nailed Kaiba’s personality was in the story) – which isn’t good. Yours is balanced – I love them both.

Then Ari’s realistic circumstances - Ari’s first kiss is from a man she had no feelings for, who used her, who was her enemy’s son, who tried to rape her, and whom she killed for the man she truly loved. Not what we dream of in our fantasies, but it’s so realistic given the story and readers appreciate that. Also, you have Ari kill a man, to save Seto. Not only does it show her love and determination, but it’s also not some sappy thing where she sacrifices herself to save him and the reader is supposed to love her for it. You never force the reader to feel any particular way about characters and that’s what I love about your writing.

On to Kaiba – without a doubt the best characterization of him I’ve ever come across. Ever. I used to think The Arrangement was the best, until I found yours (the former’s dark side was barely shown). I also find your Kaiba to be more mature than other people’s. He doesn’t yell harshly at the girl to show his hatred for people (usually the author is trying to show he’s in some sort of denial) nor is he unrealistically soft. Seto here doesn’t even bother with Ari at first, but the transition to him falling in love with HER and not her prototype is just masterful! Nothing is overdone, even his denial. Authors tend to make it too extreme, or have him waste time on a random girl just b/c she ** him off. Kaiba isn’t like that, unless you want to make him seem immature. That said, he’s more mature here than even in the show. You’ve shown sides of him not even present there. His weaknesses and fears, mostly. Though I’m a bit disappointed in not seeing more about his past in your fics but it’s all good. Kaiba is such a precious character to me, and you’ve made me like him just as much as I love him in the show. Perhaps even more.

I love the exchanges between Seto and Ari. Witty, but not random yelling (which is so annoying). Kaiba is perfect to me, but only because of his flaws and good traits combined. Ari and Seto don’t just bring out the best in each other. They bring out everything in each other and magnify it. It makes them more believable as characters, more vulnerable but real. Also, I love how everything is so subtle yet obvious when the characters speak indirectly. “You are my most precious possession” in place of the cliché “I love you.” No mush, but symbolism that speaks even louder.

Writing technicalities. You had some trouble with it at the beginning, but you so improved! One thing that bugs me about other fics is, it starts out crappy, nothing is tied together no character development bad grammar ect. but it ends up fantastic. Yours, it merely started off simple, and got more complex (the writing and style). It was great all the way through. Your vocab is also stunning and the way your word things is original and intriguing. I just love how everything flows. Sometimes it’s disappointing when it’s obvious the author herself doesn’t know what will happen next. Makes the story random.

Plot - you freaking OWN at this. The fact that romance is merely an added spice to the main course (beautifully woven in and with such a difficult character as Seto Kaiba) makes the plot all the more special. You’re great with cliffhangers and you seem like such an expert on the topics you choose to tackle (technology, psychology, ect).

Lastly, I love how everything has a meaning. The drawing Ari did, the necklace, the safety deposit key, the blue eyes white dragon, the scars. Even the kisses all have deeper meaning behind them. I noticed they went from Kaiba kissing her as a reminder of her power over him, not out of love (and she bites him), to a kiss to test for forgiveness (after they humiliated each other). Then gradually, at the end, she kisses him to show she possesses him. I love the irony in their one of a kind relationship – a work of a master, truly.

Thank you for all your writing, Lanse! I am not masterful enough with words to tell you just how much I love them!

BLIN! I hate sequels...this took me like 5 hours to read, so be happy!

OK, I got carried away. Anyway, this was wonderful, wonderful. I really enjoyed it and reviewed every single chapter.

~ChasingProse

OMFG. That was unbelievably frightening. Would the corporate world honestly engage in this?

THE END IZZE COMING! (OF your fiction. Not the apocalypse. Obviously. Shutting up now.)

CLIFFIE! DAMN YOU!

Good. Is Ari going to die?

Is Kaiba in lurve? OMFG! I'm just messing with you, no worries...

Blin. Why do you leave me hanging so?

Does she really love him? I mean, that's a bit of a revelation, don't you think?

Good. Love this so far. Their interactions...hm.

The chess game, dun dun dun! Why is this story M?

Very interesting. I like the precarious balance of their relationship.

The beginning with the freight train was very amusing.