This is great! Although, it does kind of have a hint of "people may not know what I'm talking about so I'm going to help them out with the meaning a bit" type of... ishness to it... ya... Like your "But not literally" that doesn't need to be in there. Relax! Who cares if people understand what the heck you're talking about? Half the time, I dunno what I'm talking about. Hehehe. But! If you write it in the confusing manner that you might be writing it in, it's ok! Because then everybody has their own interpretation of it, and that's what makes great poetry out of... confusing stuff... lol. Anywho, I believe I understood it, and you shouldn't worry about people not getting it. This was an awesome poem, although sometimes you get a bit silly with the wording, like "Well, that hasn't been written yet" it sounds kinda... I dunno, explanatory, again. Anywho, just trying to help here, and uh, not doing a very good job... So ya. I'm going to shut up now, hehehe. Good luck!

yay! i like it! ^__^