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| airpeeps 2008-05-14 ch 3, | abusehmm.i can see were this was going...hehe... if i am right,this story hasbeen discontinued,so there will be no more chapters? sad thing,that is.cuz this is a real good story...and i wuold have liked to see the end of it. anyways,this stary is still really good.^^ i like it...hehe. |
| Slywolf9 2008-03-17 ch 3, | abuseWhoa. That was some pretty deep stuff...I liked it a lot, tho. I mean, I was confused sometimes, but I did like it. It was an interesting scenario, and I think you pulled the characters off real well. :] |
| TheEvilBanana 2005-08-16 ch 3, | abusefantastic story! You really have something here. Update soon! |
| FireFalcon1414 2005-03-06 ch 3, | abuseNow, I don't usually read fanfictions in which Kagome attempts suicide OR gets pregnant, yet I decided to stick with this one because I enjoyed some of your other works, and I'm glad I did. While this one is considerably less humorous and playful, it maintains the strange insightfulness of the other stories of yours I have read. However... this remains unfinished. Hurry up and get the next chapter out! I wait impatiently... ~FireFalcon1414 |
| Noacat 2005-01-13 ch 3, | abuseHoly Krackatoa! I hope you plan to continue with this, for it is with the awesome! I bow low to your superior skills!! |
| Indygodusk 2004-12-04 ch 3, anon. | abuseWell written! The POV changes are a bit confusing, perhaps use a line of symbols to signify the change? I usually hate Kag-suiside stories, but you managed to handle it in a slightly understandable way. I mean that does completely suck, and I like how you showed her being a bit surprised herself. Maybe I just didn't read close enough, but I thought the completion of the jewel and settling down meant the death of Naraku. I guess not, but if not, does that mean Miroku still had the Kazaana? It is gone now right? I thought it an interesting show of character that Sess didn't even know her name, though he had fought with her and IY and had rescued her. Shows his honor I think. Why wouldn't Rin want to be called '-chan'? I mean, no suffix shows a very close relationship, a casualness unconcerned with respect, or extreme rudeness. I can see Kagome saying leave off the -san etc suffix to present herself as approachable to a child, but for the child, especially one hungry for attention, I think that the -chan suffix would indicate that this woman was acknowledging Rin and showing affection. Plus Kagome would be the only person in this girls life calling her chan. But I suppose Rin could have just been copying Kagome. Still, I think that a child needs someone to call them -chan. In this chapter, I found this last line in the fourth to last paragraph a bit confusing, "One more night with that hanyou runt and she was nearly as good as dead." None of this group is a hanyou. The runt could be Shippou, but he is full youkai. And if he means IY, and it doesn't make sense. Unless a word got left out? Very melancholy well written story so far. |
| BlueDove 2004-10-02 ch 3, | abuseNice symbolism. -Tsuki Yume |
| Miroku131 2004-08-04 ch 2, | abuseThis is soo sad! It breaks my heart, but I'm enjoying reading it. I know you're busy and you're going to be busy for a while but I'm looking forward to the next chapter. |
| Black Mage Tsucasa 2004-07-31 ch 2, | abusehey this is great. i haven't read anything that comes close to this. keep writing. |
| Defafaeth Mechqua 2004-07-30 ch 2, | abuse^_^ |
| Trina3 2004-07-29 ch 2, | abusehey your story seems great so far. update soon plese! |
| Blooded-Blade 2004-05-29 ch 1, | abuseWow! I LIKE IT! I remeber how much I loved twisted fate and when fanfiction did all this re-organizing I went to favorite authors and I had totally forgot I had you in there and I saw this story and I just had to read it cause I love your writing. It seems like a very good story to me! And you havta admit almost all the plots for Inu Yasha fanfics are pretty much taken so its gonna be hard to think of one of your own. But I would love your story no matter what. Though I do have an idea for a story plot of my own. I was thinking a Shrek-InuYasha style thing. Of course it would be very badly writtin cause I have horrible grammer and most likly OOC, but it is worth a try I think. Oh and would you happen to know of any Rin/Shippo stories? I've been looking for one but havn't had luck. Well hope you are un-grounded soon and I look forward to an update in this story! |
| Tsuki Yume 2004-03-27 ch 1, anon. | abusePoor things. Well, I'm glad you already started a new story. |
| petthekat 2004-03-23 ch 1, | abuseThis is, as all of your Sessh/Kag fics are, awesome. I beg of you to continue. Although I absolutely loved your other fics, I think this one will be my favorite. I love emotions and depth (which is basically all my writings are haha) and this story definitely has it. I'm sorry about your parents grounding you, I hope you get back to your fics soon! ~K.C. |
| *squeak* 2004-03-13 ch 1, anon. | abuseyes, a good start . . . I support it, you've written good fanfiction in the past . . . but you are also planning on continuing that other one, Biography of Black, right? It would be nice if you could do both . . . I couldn't imagine writing two at once, but, on the other hand, I couldn't really write any fanfiction at all . . . trust me, I've tried. Didn't work out too well. It died. So, yeah, please continue. |