A very good introduction to the story and well written as always. I hope you continue and update soon!

hello!

thanks for writting this story, cause Vincent is by far my favorite character and it's great to read your interpretation of the beginning of his story and how he became he dark man he is!! :-)
I definitely like the way you dig into the personalities and the emotions and I think the story you create fits the characters realy well!

so please keep on writting and submitting this fanfic!

(I'm also looking forward for the next chapter of "agapé"... I believe I'm growing addicted of your stories!...)

so, buy for now! I'll be checking (whith excitement to say the truth)for new chapters! ;-)

Glad to know that you're still around and writing! But I know real life gets in the way sometimes. Read over the constructive criticism and then reread the first chapter and then chapter two, and I like the changes you've made from the earlier one.

I don't think you made Vincent the Turk OOC at all--The man goes through a change that makes him into the VV we recognize from the game, as you say. I really hate that blasted Lucrecia woman, but I like what you've done with her character, and I can't help but keep reading even though I know where Vincent ultimately ends up. Beauty in the breakdown, I guess. I enjoyed reading Lucrecia's thoughts, especially in chapter 2 where she describes how Vincent reacts to what she says. Anyway, glad to see that you're still writing. Keep it coming when you can.

Great start!

I love reading work on the Vincent/Lucrecia/Hojo triangle (I find it so *fascinating*), and this is definitely one of the better pieces I've seen. :) This actually has a lot more thought put into it than a lot I've seen. I'm glad to see a more original attempt at retelling this story rather than the same old "Lucrecia cheats on her husband Hojo with Vincent" storyline (which is fine, but easy to get bored of seeing repeated in several different 'fics). I like your spin on things, with Lucrecia (for now, anyway) preferring Hojo over Vincent - I always thought her rejection of Vincent was something of a "I'm sorry but I don't like you that way" situation, anyway. It's refreshing to see that sort of angle!

I love your portrayal of the charcters: Lucrecia can be very difficult to write, but you do a great job with her. She's likeable and endearingly affectionate, and also very human and realistic in her difficulty in dealing with her romantic problems. She seems far more like a normal girl, and not the future mother of the world's greatest warrior, and I like that. I loved her reflections on Vincent and the development their relationship - even though she isn't in love with him, it's clear that she cares about him very much. And Vincent's character came through very well too in Lucrecia's thoughts on him. And you give a great Hojo; I love how *ambiguous* his charcter is in this - he seems to have affection for Lucrecia, but we have no clue what his real thoughts and feelings are...

I think the only thing that bothered me in this was that there was no mention of what Hojo and Lucrecia are working on in Nibelheim (the Jenova Project). The discovery of Jenova and the research going on at the Shinra mansion is very important to both scientists and is so integral to the story, seeing as it shapes the futures of every character involved...to have no mention of it, not even a one-sentence reflection...it kind-of robs your opening-chapter of a just-as-vital presence.

But that's just a tiny criticism. I hope it was helpful. Anyway, overall, I really like this! It has so much potential and I can't wait to see how this all plays out...now all you need to do is update... ;)

Good! I kinda like it so far.

This story has alot of potential.
Too bad it didn't get an update yet, but I'm still hoping for one^^.

Go downhill, hm? Even though that sounds bad, your stories are too good to pass up. =p

Wee! Some Lucrecia POV. How exciting. ^^ Ah, the weavings of the tragic triangle. My mouth lifted up into a small smile when you mentioned how Lu could tell even through his slight expressions that Vincent was excited to see her. {takes a moment} Aww, hits me right there I tell ya.
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I like the name you've given Hojo too. I've liked seasonofthepumpkin's 'Simon' as well. For me, it's a pain giving characters names. -_-; It's hard for me to choose.
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I'm enjoying Hojo and Lu's characterization so far too. Well done... Ah, gory-ness ahead, eh? Bring it on! Haha. {Vincent gives Jess pointed look} Uh, I mean, poor Vince. I hate seeing him suffer so! ^_-
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{raises water bottle} To writing!
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Jess 0:o)

Interesting chapter. :P I'm really really really suffering though as I wait for your next chapter of Flirting with Death. It's coming soon right? Please? *makes puppy dog eyes at author* I'm gonna keep reading this story too but if it gets to 'graphic' I may have to stop. When I read I get vivid pictures in my mind and people suffering will make me cry (yes, yes. I know I'm pathetic) Great story so far though! Keep up the good work. :D

A wonderful start!

Two things: it's Lucrecia with a c, not a t. And these lines here:

"You are so cruel." She threw an eraser at him.

"He is what he is," he said without sympathy.

There should've been a reaction to the thrown eraser there (or if it didn't hit Hojo, then some indication as to where it went), otherwise it seems as though the action abruptly disappeared with the start of the next sentence.

Interesting, your choice of first name for Hojo :) And if it's any author I trust to handle gore and violence tastefully it's you (and Seasonofthepumpkin too). Update soon, okay?

Hanzatsu is a good name for Hojo... But what's "Asshole" in Japanese? That might be a better name. :) I love this story so far. :GLOMPS VINCENT: Stupid, beautiful Lucrecia.