pretty good chapter, but instead of telling people she's telepathic and empathic, just say tel-empathic, that basically encompases all of the powers that she said.

Like the other reviewers have been saying, this is an adequite story, with a mary-sue OC. With reworking you could overcome that. I know that you're going to 'resolve it at the end of the plot' but, I know that alot of readers don't want to have to put up with a sue that long. It's not your writing that is in question here, just some of your characterisation.

Anyway, that's not the main topic of my review. No matter how petty this is, I have one major problem with your story; one of the facets of your central characters mutations. You said that she can "control, create, convert and destroy energy of all types". That is scientifically impossible. The law of the conservation of energy blatantly states 'energy cannot be created or destroyed, merely transferred.'. I don't care if this is a just a fanfiction or not, please, just obey the laws of science! Being able to control and convert energy is enough, but creating it? You cannot get something from nothing, especially where science is concerned.

Now that I ahve that off my chest, I'll leave you to your writing.

Shame you haevn't updated for so long - i hope you get back to it soon as this is a really good fic!

KEEP WRITING!LUv the story...it is so GREAT!! luv the plot...especially how she and Wolverine have SOO much in common...

I'm getting through this slowly. Ok, first of all, i would like to just say you have a wonderful way with words. Your writing style is fab! but here comes the part i hate...
I'm sure you've heard this all before, but your character doesnt strike me as being original. A woman who has been through the same experiences as Logan who just happens to sit down at a table with him? Her powers don't make her the most powerful mutant on the planet, and WHERE did it say that magneto was? yes, they are both powerful.. but its rediculous to call her the most powerfull mutant. Marysue? yes.
Haven't read it all, so I will leave you on a nicer note. I am interested by your story. I want to see whats gonna happen and how you play it out. I'll keep reading, after all, it is well writen...

LVM
a review in return? not sure if I am up to your skills, but it would be nice to see what ya think :P

oo, suspense! I don't know much about the X-men fandom, but I can say you have a beautiful style of writing :) clear and interesting, and your descriptions are lovely.
I do have a couple points of critique, though:
- Tatiana does seem to be a bit Sue-ish, with her extraordinary powers and beautiful appearance. It might help if you gave us more insight into her character - have her show some emotion, a little passion, anger, something.
- the beginning is a bit rushed, and the chapters are quite short. you could expand the scenes a bit and it certainly wouldn't do any harm.
great story! keep writing :)

hm...interesting...sorry it took me so long to read it, ive been having my own share of problems...keep writing, k?

I think you've done a nice job portraying me-uh, i mean Tatiana. You got the hair down. The eyes-well, i guess green is fine. Its nice you got the hair perfect--that rarely happens when people--uh, how do i say this...put me in fan fictions.
Keep writing!
Tatiana

big long gir.
The first chapter, i think you need to flesh it out. (I think I said this but I've forgot) It happened to fast. That would have normally turned me away (if i didn't feel bad for making a sorta harsh review. Since its the first chapter, you really have to let them know how good of a writer you are. you might try to turn it into two or three. (after you are done writing the story so you can repost it)
you are a really good writer. After i read the second chapter, i saw how you can make a story run smoothly. the rest of the story is ging a little slower (in a good way).
there was something else. oh yeah! Your grammar and spelling is very good. THis is my biggest problem so when people do it well It makes me happy. you over used lip biting. it stresses out readers to see something used over and over. Try to find something else. like maybe Tatiana can bite her lip and scott can do something else.
I hope you have other stories so i can read them! Sorry if I sound pushy.

and the good news is: your fic so doesn't suck. and you have two really positive rviews. Wich is way better then :
I can't *ing believe you. this story is *ing sorry. you mother*er. * you and this fic.
yeah cuase those aren't fun. no no. I'me starting to get into this story and will have a nice long review at the current end chapter.(yea as if this wasn't long.)

ok i think this probably is going to be a good story. but this happened way too fast. but try to make flaws or something.other wise it's, well, a mary sue. yeah you've probably heard that one. sorry for badgering you.i promise i will read the rest to make sure that i'm not just putting a lable on your story.

In case you were all wondering, Tatiana is NOT Wolverine's daughter. (For those of you who have read the whole story...) And I know she seems too perfect, but it's hard to show someone's faults when the story isn't from their point of view. (The following sentence refers to something that occurs in a later chapter...) If she's using her telepathy and empathy against everyone, which she might be, having all the students and teachers think she's great is very possible. In later chapters, her faults (they are their and they are big) will be revealed...Please forgive me if she seems Mary-Sue-ish. Like I said, none of this story is told from her point of view, so her thoughts remain a mystery to all but me (being the author) and Scott and Wolverine can't be with her all the time.

I'm afraid that I have to sort of agree with the first reviewer. It does seem rather "Mary-Sue-ish". Good descriptive scenes, dialogue etc., but your female lead character seems to be a tad too perfect. Now I hope you'll forgive me, if this doesn't out to be true in the chapters to come (i.e. maybe we learn that she's human at heart and does have faults). But don't let criticism discourage you. Try to make her more real - there's nothing wrong with OC's (I actually like their inclusions) provided that both you and your readers can identify with them.

yes I think your character is a Mary Sue. Yeah you're making her a little too perfect. 3 powers? Stronger than magneto? give me a brake plz! K you are a good writer! Just make her a little less perfect. Not everyone at the whole school can like her. God I'm getting tired of OC stories... it's the same old thing all the time! Mary Sue! Wolverine's daughter! sheesh he must have many daughters with all of this crap floating around here! But! your story isn't bad! just your Sue, I mean OC! You are a good writer just change your OC *coughsuecough* so that she's not so perfect! ^-^
~*TKPiper*~ (plz don't take this as a flame!)