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| Morden Night 2007-04-25 ch 2,  | abuseThis was really short. These first two chapters only spanned approximately 2 pages, They should have been stretched to at LEAST twenty, if not more for dramatic effect. Basically it's too rushed, all the information that is necessary is thrown at you like a fastball. You barely have time to react to the parts that are supposed to be really emotional because they only span about two sentences in length. I know English isn't your first language and I give you kudos for what what you have accomplished in this story. It's really quite a good idea. I'd love to read more. hope you get over your writers block. |
| dennisud 2007-01-22 ch 2, | abuseGood start but a bit too much AN's and will this eva be updated? |
| Michael The-Zorch Haney 2006-12-07 ch 2, | abuseNot bad, please continue. |
| AsianAnimeGoddess 2005-10-11 ch 2, | abuseCute! ^__^ Im surprised Engilsh is not ur 1st language ur really good at it! ^__^. Awesome sotry, totally luv it but you hav not updated in a while. please update soon, im going to add this story to my favs and alert list, so pwez update SOON! |
| Daniel Shinigami 2005-04-29 ch 1, | abuseI doubt even a furious Ranma would call Shampoo and Ukyo **. Good plot however |
| Silverscale 2004-06-23 ch 2, | abuseA very nice chapter really touching. Keep updating. |
| VizeerLord 2004-06-07 ch 2, | abuseyou will write more |
| dogbertcarroll 2004-06-03 ch 2, | abuseOn to the beatdown! |
| Blizzard209 2004-05-30 ch 1, | abuseHEy it was nice! i like it alot, ->not a big fan of akane/ranma |
| Jerry Unipeg 2004-05-30 ch 2, | abuseNice. |
| Jerry Unipeg 2004-05-30 ch 1, | abuseNice start. |
| old fool 2004-05-30 ch 2, | abusegood story bud. keep it coming |
| Silverscale 2004-05-30 ch 2, | abuseThat's right show Akane her place. She isn't anything but a 'I'm-a-princess-and-I-gets-anything-I-want'. (And I WON'T change my mind on that. Sure she is a nice girl SOME fics. But in the real story of Ranma½ she's a real ##¤%£@€&££$€&(/)&%¤¤£3€{[€££€!) |
| Mz-Kitty-Kat 2004-05-30 ch 2, | abuseWell the story was pretty short, but it was still good... Im guessing that Nabiki is in a coma and her spirit or mind is wondering? Akane's reaction seems to be her honest portrayal since she denies Ranma all the time and Anger always get the better of her... Pls write some more Id really like to see the outcome of you fic (",) |
| TornadoReviewer 2004-05-30 ch 2, | abuseRanma/Nabiki is one of my favourite couples! There are DEFINETLY to many fics focusung on Akane. Nabiki-on the other hand-is a great character with a lot of possibilieties.Good beginning but I'll give you a wird of advice-make updates bigger.Sometimes is better to wait and make a one 'long page' tahan just a half of it.And don't worry about late update.If the story will be good the readers will patietly wait for an update. |