This was really short. These first two chapters only spanned approximately 2 pages, They should have been stretched to at LEAST twenty, if not more for dramatic effect. Basically it's too rushed, all the information that is necessary is thrown at you like a fastball. You barely have time to react to the parts that are supposed to be really emotional because they only span about two sentences in length.

I know English isn't your first language and I give you kudos for what what you have accomplished in this story. It's really quite a good idea.

I'd love to read more. hope you get over your writers block.

Good start but a bit too much AN's and will this eva be updated?

Not bad, please continue.

Cute! ^__^ Im surprised Engilsh is not ur 1st language ur really good at it! ^__^. Awesome sotry, totally luv it but you hav not updated in a while. please update soon, im going to add this story to my favs and alert list, so pwez update SOON!

I doubt even a furious Ranma would call Shampoo and Ukyo **. Good plot however

A very nice chapter really touching.
Keep updating.

you will write more

On to the beatdown!

HEy it was nice! i like it alot,
->not a big fan of akane/ranma

Nice.

Nice start.

good story bud. keep it coming

That's right show Akane her place.
She isn't anything but a 'I'm-a-princess-and-I-gets-anything-I-want'.
(And I WON'T change my mind on that.
Sure she is a nice girl SOME fics.
But in the real story of Ranma½ she's a real ##¤%£@€&££$€&(/)&%¤¤£3€{[€££€!)

Well the story was pretty short, but it was still good... Im guessing that Nabiki is in a coma and her spirit or mind is wondering? Akane's reaction seems to be her honest portrayal since she denies Ranma all the time and Anger always get the better of her... Pls write some more Id really like to see the outcome of you fic
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Ranma/Nabiki is one of my favourite couples!
There are DEFINETLY to many fics focusung on Akane.
Nabiki-on the other hand-is a great character with a lot of possibilieties.Good beginning but I'll give you a wird of advice-make updates bigger.Sometimes is better to wait and make a one 'long page' tahan just a half of it.And don't worry about late update.If the story will be good the readers will patietly wait for an update.