Nicely done. I liked your characterisation of Draco - he's frustrated and angry but not made into a caricature - lovely job. The way he crucioed Ginny was well done; it's a horrible thing to do, but you portrayed the event as an act of anguish and rage rather than cruelty that works very well. Yhanks for sharing it.

It isn't half bad. Maybe a little to much stated, but a strong premise, and a good amount of Draco nastiness.