I truly enjoyed your story, read it in one day as a matter of fact. It's so much more original than many of the other smallville fanfics out there. I just have a couple praises and suggestions for you, please don't take any of the critiques the wrong way as lex said (quoting Benjamin Franklin) in the ep of smallville i was watching today, "critics are our friend, they point out our faults." I really don't know if thats a DIRECT quote but close enough.

Good stuff:

1. original 2. GREAT story developement 3. Seemed to really think everything through, not many loopholes

Suggestions:

1. this story had A LOT of potential, and it seemed like at the end it just kinda died out, like you got bored or something. I dunno, i guess i didn't expect a story with so much stamina to die out in one day. (i guess that's what i get for reading non-stop)

2. It seems that even though your story is developes quite well it lacks in the detail area, especially in the last five chapters. I'm not saying describe every single thought, object, etc that's there. But give the reader something to feel like they are truly there, feeling what the characters are feeling. Describe scenery a bit more for example. I'm sure you have a perfect image in your mind of the building where Alley and Clark were held, but while i was reading it i had no idea. just something to think about in your next stories...

Okay, wow that was a LONG review, sorry to ramble on like that i have a tendency of doing that. Well, keep up the writing! Love the story!

Thank you so much for that wonderful fic! I know I wasn't checking back as often as I should have, but I was pleasantly surprised to find all the chapters! This was wonderful, and you should definately continue writing - whether it be Smallville, Batman, Hercules, or whatever! :) Great job! I look forward to reading more of your work!

Awesome story and great way to end it. I loved it all and that would be awesome if that was the way they turned lex evil. Good job on the research too. As i was reading i wasnt thinking if you had done the research. Just makes it that much better cuz you did. I really do believe you should write another or since you like batman better, write a batman one. People would probably really enjoy that too. Awesome story amanda and can't wait to see if you do another smallville or batman fic. Good stuff.

whoa like 1/6 of the chapter was the authors note... umm ok that was off topic well i must say i like superman most (as far as heros go) but i root on the bad guys :) so i liked how in the end it would fit into the legend... this is something that could seriously swap perception of things and make somebody change... seriously the story is great ending there... if anything you would be better off making a sequel but i don't recomend it... the story ends here it seems a nice place to end :) now just start writing another masterpiece :)

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It's over ::sob sob:: I can't believe it. I've loved this story from the start. DEFINATELY write more stuff! Ur an awesome writer...(this is my last review for this story) man it feels like a part of me is gone! I used to always watch for this story. ::breaks down sobbing more::I loved it. U r so AWESOME! This is the first story I've stuck through the whole way, i give up on most, or they'll give up or it just starts to suck! ::sighs:: this has always been on my favorites list. I'm gonna miss it. I had a ton of fun reading this. Keep Writing

Kyo-obsessedru2

aka Kyo-Luver

First known as Supergrl11

(ur always highly reccomended!)

great job on the story, and a great ending. A little abrubt, i did not expect you to kill her off. Please keep writing.

you evil evil person...how could you leave us off there. Update soon!

She DIED! NO! SHE CANT DIE! Okay, so its your story and whatever can happen is up to you but... SHE DIED! :( Very wonderful story, just i dont get on well with sad endings usually.

Wonderful last chapter! I loved it! You did such a wonderful job with this story; I really enjoyed reading it. I think you should definately (can never spell that word) write another! Have a wonderful day!

Oh man, I knew that was coming but didn't wish to believe it! Excellent story, K, thanks for all the time you put into the story. Keep up your great writing.

Oh my gosh...this has to be your best chapter...wow i almost felt the tears in my eyes...dang i was so hoping for a twist in this one... my the tape was going to tell them that their was a to sun light or something weird to bring her back... but the way you did it was the best way to do it... plus you left yourself to continue if you wanted to... i hope that you do...but this was a good way to end a great 20 chapters in the world of smallvile... so please keep writing because you inspired me so much and i hope that i can let you read some of my stuff once i write it... so thanks again for letting me view your work... May God Bless everything you do...

Anthony

yeah! awsome finish! Perfect 10! Now were is my tissue box? *sob,sob*

Aw man …I got teary-eyed in that last & final chapt…

NO…it can’t be the end…

This was an excellent fic…I so love Lex & I also love Supes…a battle rages in me for both…lol

Thanks for the great read…it was fun…

I definitely think you should write another fic…no, let me correct myself I “know” you should…

I hope everything goes well in your life…

be safe & happy M ;-)

WOW! this is...wow! i can't wait for the next chapter! this is awesome!

Just read ur story - absolutely kewl. Please write more soon?... Please? i gotta know what happens (",)