I'm loven this fic, added it to my c2

Hey~ interesting start, please update soon!

it's very good but please try to spell check my eyes are dead

Youre plot was good but youre spelling was a little off.
(i would recomend a spell check.
lol

You really need to either spell check your work or read through it before you post it or get a beta reader. Or all three. People can give you a certain amount of leeway with bad spelling, and so on, but getting the names of canon characters wrong...come on! You've read the books, right? It's not difficult to check the names. Otherwise it seems like a kinda interesting story.
Enjoy writing it.

Yes, proofreading would be very good!

hey again I really love the story don't know why more people didn't review but any way thanx for takeing the ideas in to consideration
cant wait to read more
SILVER

I like it has the makings of a great story but needs to be proof read and dialog should be separate like:
Two silent people glaring at each other, one grinning, one enraged, moments later a figure appeared and took the seat at the end between Harry and Snape.
Esmerelda spoke. "That is enough Snape."
Snape broke eye contact with a nasty glare and left the room. Harry Looked surprised but slightly pleased, Esmerelda excused herself and Harry, both leaving the remainder of the table staring speechless at the empty end of the table. Finally after a few moments the youngest of the Weaslys, Ginny spoke.
"What jus happened?" Mrs. Weasly responded.
"Best not talk about it, now finish your supper, dear."
The dishes were cleared but very littler food had been touched after the incident.
Other wise the story is awesome
Can’t wait to read more
SILVER

could be good a bit of proof reading would help though