I did really like this and I'm glad someone had the idea to do it. I'm of the opinion though that there were some plotlines that didn't need to be there, although they are there in the game some are not really needed.

I think our hero was a bit too perfect, every lightside action was taken. Not that it's a bad thing but it can make the character a bit more intresting especially after the revalations about her past come to the front.

I also felt you could have ran away a bit more with some of the story lines, prehaps "fix" a few things you weren't personnally happy with that happened in the game. I'd have also to have loved to see a little bit more after the ending and have some specuation on what happens with & between the characters after the threat is gone.

Still, maybe i'm just nit-picking. :) You put in a great effort and I'd love to see you come up with your take on the sequal.

so are you going to continue this? or is this the end? i think they might need some wrapping up..

i always that that both side of the codes and view of the force is..off, it's mostly center, the universe is afterall grey

tease eh?

lol, like that last sarcastic line

brilliant, brilliant... BRILLIANT!

Excelent story. I realy like it. Can't wait to read more,

Another chapter, but still no interactions between Revan and Bastila.

Story is getting more interesting, hopefully though there will be more Bastila and Revan scenes.

Great start, very nice story.

great story just one litle mistake you have made it is not TDA but TAD (temporary asingt duty)and if i spell incorectly then sorry i am not allways thad good at spelling espeshelie not in a foren langueth

cool story are you going to make a KOTOR:TSL story aswell if so can you keep the LSF as the main CH and have her peared with Visas Marr (SP)

It is strange. Normaly, I would not read a pairing like this, but something told me to at least check this one out. I am very impressed by the first chapter and I am looking forward to what you have written thus far.

Excellent story. I actually went back and played the game again thinking of your dialogue and events while I played. I will definitely be reading your other stories. I thank you for a most entertaining tale.

Not sure what else to say here that I didn't say in my last review. The parts of this story that don't read like a transcript of the game are actually pretty decent. But it lacks focus. Many of the sidequests and the miscellaneous encounters, so very important in a videogame, are mostly a distraction here. You need to sit down and ask yourself what your story is actually ABOUT, and then write THAT. If a random encounter or sidequest that was in the game doesn't contribute in any way to the story you're telling... don't mention it. At all. Hell, there might be entire planets that you visit in the game that aren't particularly important for the story you're telling.

Let your story be something more than a transcript of the videogame. Let it become its own tale.