this is a cute chapter, and one of my favorites from the last time I read this story. great job.

Loving the story so far. Thanks for your work!

A handy trick to know if you should use passed or past: try replacing it with a synonym.
E.g. passed is the preterit of the verb "to pass" (cf. it ends with -ed like most verbs in that tense) so it can usually be replaced by "went" or "walked" or something similar (I passed by my grandmother's house on the way = I went by my grandmother's house on the way).
Past, in the sense we're interested in here, is a preposition similar in sense to "by" or "in front of" or "near", etc. (I walked past the post office = I walked by the post office).

hp IN JAIL? You jumped the shark.

Ginny deciding everything else is more important than HP? OK. Why the need for HP to hang on to her affections to the point that he's willing to risk other people's life and limb for it?

I thought women are more prone to kill themselves when their significant other rejects them. What is HP's excuse?

okay that is torture! you aren't going to continue it? sigh, not fair, but I suppose considering how long this story already is that it might be unfair to ask even more of you at this moment.
I really do love your story though, its really good. very long and very complicated let me tell you. But good. I specially like all the bits with Snape and Harry, I mean they still hate each other but... I just love how...close they're getting. It's kinda cute, and that ending was great! just awsome!
Well i can't really say much for plot holes since i've read this on and off for the last two weeks and its all jumbeled, but spelling and grammar wise there were more than just a few errors, but considering how long this story is then it's kinda bound to happen.
Neways, I'm pretty tired so I'll just stop here, just please don't give up on this story completely, at least you know get an outline for the sequel and store it somewhere for when life is a little less complicated. I would hate for this to be left unfinished. *puppy dog eyes*

I really enjoyed this story. It was very well written, plausible (as much as a story about magic can be I guess ;] ) and well plotted. The only thing that you messed up on that I could see was "Brit-picking" using "Mom" instead of "Mum" etc.
Nothing too horrible, obviously.

I would say that it's disappointing that you ended the story here with Harry at the Dursleys, but it is what JKR does herself, so I can't really say that can I? Still, the story is unfinished and I really hope you continue. I am looking forward to more on Ginny's empath ability and Snape's meeting with Lily after all these years and hearing more from the Runespoor.

Critique: Your work could improve a bit with a little more editing. Some scenes seemed to drag a bit and some were very long.

Even so, I enjoyed reading this fic a lot. Good work!

I really enjoyed your story, I do wish you had been able to complete the sequel but RL does what it does, so thanks for writing the 1st story, it was great.

phyllis

Superb beginning!

Brit picking. It's Mum not Mom. I know it's a little thing, but it's enough to literally SCREAM that you're American (Or learned English from an American teacher)

Thank you so much for this gift of a story. I applaude you for putting your time and effort into this. You are amazing!

Like it. Good job. Well written. Love the time loops!

It's a long long story, yet never get me boring. So many problems still unsolve in this story, I really hope the sequel will come out soon despite everything you say at the last author note. Please continue this story, I'll be waiting for the sequel. Thank you

This chapter made me cry again. I wonder how can McGonagall make her sudden appearance in the memory?is it okay to just enter the memory whithout telling Dumbledore first?
By the way I come from Indonesia, so forgive me for my terrible English

Oh God, it's so sad *sobs* you described Harry's childhood very well and I have to stop reading now and then to wiped my tears, thanks god nobody is around or I'll embarrass myself for sobbing infront of my computer!

really nice fic. i hope you keep up writing!!

You have put a lot of time and effort into writing an absolutely amazing story! What an incredible plot and character development that never seemed to waver--even over what was years. No wonder this story is on so many favorite story lists. How you ever managed to keep it so tight when it seems so many things went wrong, I'll never know. But that's what makes you an author and me a reader. Even when I thought the anger at Dumbledore was going on a little too long, you justified your choice in the plot and even made references to it long after that thread was finished that made it remain an important aspect of the character. In fact, Dumbledore seemed human, even though he remained powerful. Harry became a characer worth his standing. Ron and Ginny both became more than mere cardboard background, and Hermione more realistic, too. Thank you so much for sharing your story. I would gladly follow anything you wanted to add to this. But you are right--it should be because you want to write it and enjoy the process. Again, outstanding work. I might just adopt 'cheers' into my vocabulary.