hey can you make more?it would be nice:)

well sorry for askin' this but:is lily black you know umm...harmony potter? cause i dont quite get it.

ok this one was better, but Ron needs to die...or get his stuffing nocked out for siccing filch on them

lol the tickle assault

head spinning...going too fast...ugh

again rushed, it's hard to tell what exactly is happening

good but very rushed

Loved it! Onward to the second one!

You left alot of stuff out. Do not reply.

This was like just neat from the start 2 the finish

Sounds quite neat so far.

Cute!

You keep Leaving out a bunch of things inbetween scenes ... or ...parts ...or whatever it is you call them. Please do not reply.

Good. I lavish encouragment.

Hello. I loved it, but it was all really confusing. Where are all the replies from Lily's Mum? Please consentrate when you make Fan Fics. And why are Sirius and Lupin Lily's uncles? Why didn't Lily find out that she's acually Harmony Potter (Or is she?)? Don't have friends over when you create fan fics. And please put it in words when time elapses. Thank you. I hope this will help you write better Fan Fics. Well, good-bye,

Bellatrixhater

Really a fun story! :) I especially liked it when Snape was involved. ;) He's one of my favorite characters.

Pretty well written, interesting. Really liked the description of Lily Black in the mirror of Erisad.