I like the idea of this, and the way you kept the personalities in check. :D Very interesting. I liked it.

I want more more more more!:)

I want more of that!

I've read an awful lot of fan fics on this site and none are as good as that one.

Whoop, whoop! Keep up with it Scarlett!

This woman can write! i don't know where she learned such bizarre notions, but she pictures it in a way that no fan fiction story I've ever read could. And this story seems to capture Mr. Rainey in the way we don't want, but must see. I loved this story. It's very entertaining and I can just see Johnny Depp playing this out. I give this 5 stars! Excellent work!

You know what the sad thing is about all this... It makes to much damn since to me... Ah the curse of being a writer. ;)

Anyway, luv, great beginning! Can't wait to see where it goes!

and he surprised himself with the sureness that his own voice held

- he's finally taking a stand, albeit a confused and disoriented stand, but one nonetheless

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You can’t lie to me… I am you

- and when he starts lying to himself... he's lost.

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drats. to be continued again. no, i mean its a good thing, but that means i dont have anything to read of yours until then. lol. wow, that came out horribly wrong in the beginning, didnt it. lol. update soon? talk to you then!

One minute? One hour? Why is it so easy for me to lose track?

- schizophrenia, my dear. it'll get ya everytime

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I need a cigarette.

- m... love Mort Rainey

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this whole story's extremely poetic. really. just listened. not moving. not breathing. poetic, its beautiful, really.

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humming softly to a tuneless melody that undoubtedly only he could hear… they would have surely thought him mad.

- just following his beat, this is it, and he's following through. like a writer. the words and phrases echo in the mind until we write them down on paper. no one else sees them until they're there...

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You really have forgotten, haven’t you

- barriers of the min, set up to protect, but most times it just drives the person even crazier

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The mirror image of himself.

- scary. to be confronted with one's own demons. hmm... good luck, Mort!

Everytime I think I've caught up i find more stories that I havent reviewed. I see the publication date and feel even worse. Man!

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But he suspected no one would dare to come near his cabin anyway, they all thought him crazy

- people fear what they dont understand. geez

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consisting of only corn, Doritos and a can of Mountain Dew.

- hehehe, well balanced meal, eh? Love Mountain dew, but I prefer Pringles to Doritos. rats

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Nothing but the small laptop in front of him and the story it was holding.

- true writer, writer to the heart

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It happened just like that, the inspiration had left.

- the fates play with us lesser mortals yet again

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51 pages in 4 hours. holy crap. thats truly unbelivable

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awesome first chapter, i cant believe i havent reviewed it yet! Wow, i heartily apologize, i do. lol

Heheh, another story about a crazy Johnny Depp character. They're the best kind, aren't they?

Wow! This is really good, amazingly well written! You get a really good mood across through your writing which really fits the film! Please continue! ^_^

~JessieRose~

Very nice. You acheive a great, creepy tone perfect for the film. Poor Mort... I want to see him remember everything.. Will he be going pyscho again? (I hope not!) Alright, I'm rambling. I love your stuff, keep writing.

Another beautifully written chapter! I hope you continue.

You really create a definite mood with your style of writing and some of your lines are so poetic. I love that kind of writing.

Hey this is really good in a creepy sorta way. Your doing a great job so keep up the good work. And it would be great if you could update "sand in a hourglass" too.

Wow... You are amazing...
Your style is so polished...Professional, even ^^ Keep going!