that was sad. I'm getting teary eyed

OMG, I can barely see anything anymore, I just hope I fon't get my keyboard wet, seriously, my face is SOAKED! oh, and could you write this story with an alternate ending where God saves Lucy's life in the end, and she doesn't die? I would really appriciate it. I just want to know what would have happened.

Oh yes, we're bawling like babies here. No really, we are. Granted, it's because this story was so incredibly stupid, but...
There's just one major flaw in this story, the fact that the 'fleeing felon rule', which allowed cops to shoot at fleeing suspects, was abolished about 20 years ago. So hey, that was stupid. On top of that, you tried so hard to make everyone cry that it was rather annoying. Too many damn cliches. But hey, props for not making her find out she was pregnant right before she croaked.

I really liked your fanfic. It was really sad. But it was also very well written. Good job. :)

sad story, i think i cried it was really good, so you should update. but everyone makes lucy or kevin and the other one becomes very depressed, it makes me mad.

well, i think that you should change the summary from giving it away to something else. you know, to add suspense. But also, try and make your quotes more organized. Other than that, its great...Keep writing.

really good, keep it going!

That was a very powerfully, emotionally written story and I loved it. My suggestion would be when you put these lines in
[Made a few mistakes, yeah, like sometimes we do, No matter how my heart breaks, but I made it back to you,] to put them in brackets or something because the first time I thought it was someone in the story speaking and it threw me off.

The storyline was great but it was hard to read because of all the huge paragraphs. Some advice, when writing dialogue, do it like this:
"Hi," she said.
"It's good to see you," he replied.
It makes your story much easier to read when broken up like that. Long paragraphs just make people want to skip ahead or skim through the story. You should also capitalize the first letter of the dialogue.
[“Omg

I'm angry, you make me cry! ouin!

This is very good. Maybe you could do a prologe.

this was a very very sad story. I loved it though. I hope you continue. Maybe you could write about Lucy in Heaven and the Camden's lives after Lucy.

This was just great. So much emotion. It was great.
Just a little word of adivce:
It's kind of hard to read with the big paragraphs. If you start a new paragraph everytime someone new spoke, it'd be much easier to read and people wouldn't justskim through them because they were kind of hard to read.
Great little story!

so schWe3eT!
realli gooT 2 ^^

"'Omg' he whispered to Lucy..." ACK! No slang please.