A nice story, but 'kudasai' generally means 'have' in Japanese. 'Onegai' is a more direct translation of 'please', with 'shimasu' said afterwards meaning a sign of politeness. Other than that, there was no grammar mistakes that I could see, but I am unsure because English is not the language I generally speak. . . Please continue to pursue your passion of writing!

amazing storry! all the character were completing NOT OOC. if hiei and botan ever (which im still hoping that maybe the creators of yu yu hakusho will make a ova of hiei and botan getting together) get together this is how i would imagine that would go.

OMIKAMI THAT WAS SO KAWAII! YAY HIEI/BOTAN FLUFF!

This is sweet!

Thought I'm not really a fan of this couple, it's impossible not to notice how sweet it was.

Ah, the cuteness. Great job. _

Oh my God, that was the most awsome thing that I have ever read. You RULE!

oh my god that was so beatiful he was all like and she was all lkie liking him and stuff and i don't know what i'm saying

ooh... HB goodness! I absolutely love this fic! I hope you write more!

i liked it but hiei was so OC. but at least this story had an explaination as to why hiei was OC. But that's not the point i loved it

(blink, blink) wow ... that was different. it's very cool, though! i really like it! i hope to read more great fics by you soon! (goes off in search of more fics by author)

Kawaii... _ HB is the best! Hope you'll keep doing HB fanfics in the future! It is really a nice work! Gambatte!

YAY!LOVE IT ! DON'T HATE IT! WHOOHOO! 11 OUTTA 10! Oh whoops. Excuse my sudden outburst. Very good I like it. Now um could you please review for my story? Its Fox and Wolf romance or Humor in umm R please review. Thank you and buh bye!

That was sweet. I never really thought of the idea of Botan and Hiei.

That was really sweet! I hope you write more stories.

AW! That was soo cute! This is my first HB to to read!