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wert1990
2009-07-19 . chapter 6
please revive this great storry!
Dumbledork
2009-06-09 . chapter 6
Very entertaining. You should continue this.
Skunkboy
2007-11-23 . chapter 6
I love it. Please write more.
Black Angel of Destruction
2007-11-06 . chapter 6
Nice story! Although I hope you'd be able to continue. Otherwise, its a good story!
Pug Mythril
2007-08-08 . chapter 6
Thank you for writing this story. I greatly enjoy it. Keep up the good work.
P. Mythril
keichan2
2007-05-20 . chapter 6
Yes!

Thank you for the new chapter!
I hope that you have chained your muse to your computer, so that she cannot get away and delay another chapter...
I really like the concept of this story and would like to read more.

Please update soon!
FalseExact
2007-05-19 . chapter 6
This is a story I'm really getting to like, keep up the good work
firelordeg
2007-05-18 . chapter 6
im glad to see you back i love this story please update again a.s.a.l.a. also the only thing i can critisise about this story curantly is that the chapters are not long enuf other than that it is fantastic
AMWOOD co
2007-05-18 . chapter 6
Helpful criticism... how about "so much for the preliminaries and now ON TO THE MAIN EVENT!"

You have set up an excellent start to a nice long story. Flushing of background via flashbacks or dialogue will be necessary later, but I think you should start with the conflict that will be driving your story soon lest your readers become disinterested.

Also, I don't see some of the wrecking crew taking this lying down... "Vile cur! How dare you make my pig-tailed goddess into a demon! Have at thee!"

From the offices of AMWOOD co
Sargon Dorsai
2007-05-18 . chapter 6
Mm... Kasumi, Ranma and Ranko together... oh, I mean, er... what was I doing? Reviewing? Yes, that's right.

Anyway, an interesting story idea you have here. The writing style isn't that bad either. It's fairly easy to follow, though there are some spelling and word errors that you need to catch. Maybe read through the story outloud before you post. Since the chapters are rather on the short side it shouldn't be that hard.

As for the story itself, I don't really think Ranma would take over the family like that. The only reason he would do so is as conditions for him to stay, not just for him to ride roughshod over the desires of the family, especially not after the way you pointed out earlier in the story that gods don't force their will on others.

Now RANKO on the other hand would be able to do so. Just something to keep in mind.

Also, how far in advance have you planned for this story?
Wonderbee31
2007-04-09 . chapter 6
Great to see more of this, though that one line, "Akane, being the blockhead that she is" just made things rock out loud, as well as Kasumi at least using her imagination a bit if things were ewhat they seemed at the table, LOL.
Nysk
2007-04-07 . chapter 6
Good story premise
a little short on spelling

Overall, a good read.
I look forward to more
TenWings
2007-04-07 . chapter 6
I loce the fic, update soon!
TenWings
2007-04-07 . chapter 4
Bad move Akane, shes going to kick your ** YES BABY!
ranger5
2007-04-07 . chapter 6
I love this story. Moves kinda fast, but still an excellent read. I just re-read this last week and was whining to myself that there hadn't been any updates.

Since it worked I'm whining again about how long it'll be til the next one (g).

Keep up the good work.
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