 wert1990 2009-07-19 . chapter 6please revive this great storry! |
 Dumbledork 2009-06-09 . chapter 6Very entertaining. You should continue this. |
 Skunkboy 2007-11-23 . chapter 6I love it. Please write more. |
 Black Angel of Destruction 2007-11-06 . chapter 6Nice story! Although I hope you'd be able to continue. Otherwise, its a good story! |
 Pug Mythril 2007-08-08 . chapter 6Thank you for writing this story. I greatly enjoy it. Keep up the good work.
P. Mythril |
 keichan2 2007-05-20 . chapter 6Yes!
Thank you for the new chapter!
I hope that you have chained your muse to your computer, so that she cannot get away and delay another chapter...
I really like the concept of this story and would like to read more.
Please update soon! |
 FalseExact 2007-05-19 . chapter 6This is a story I'm really getting to like, keep up the good work |
 firelordeg 2007-05-18 . chapter 6im glad to see you back i love this story please update again a.s.a.l.a. also the only thing i can critisise about this story curantly is that the chapters are not long enuf other than that it is fantastic |
 AMWOOD co 2007-05-18 . chapter 6Helpful criticism... how about "so much for the preliminaries and now ON TO THE MAIN EVENT!"
You have set up an excellent start to a nice long story. Flushing of background via flashbacks or dialogue will be necessary later, but I think you should start with the conflict that will be driving your story soon lest your readers become disinterested.
Also, I don't see some of the wrecking crew taking this lying down... "Vile cur! How dare you make my pig-tailed goddess into a demon! Have at thee!"
From the offices of AMWOOD co |
 Sargon Dorsai 2007-05-18 . chapter 6Mm... Kasumi, Ranma and Ranko together... oh, I mean, er... what was I doing? Reviewing? Yes, that's right.
Anyway, an interesting story idea you have here. The writing style isn't that bad either. It's fairly easy to follow, though there are some spelling and word errors that you need to catch. Maybe read through the story outloud before you post. Since the chapters are rather on the short side it shouldn't be that hard.
As for the story itself, I don't really think Ranma would take over the family like that. The only reason he would do so is as conditions for him to stay, not just for him to ride roughshod over the desires of the family, especially not after the way you pointed out earlier in the story that gods don't force their will on others.
Now RANKO on the other hand would be able to do so. Just something to keep in mind.
Also, how far in advance have you planned for this story? |
 Wonderbee31 2007-04-09 . chapter 6Great to see more of this, though that one line, "Akane, being the blockhead that she is" just made things rock out loud, as well as Kasumi at least using her imagination a bit if things were ewhat they seemed at the table, LOL. |
 Nysk 2007-04-07 . chapter 6Good story premise
a little short on spelling
Overall, a good read.
I look forward to more |
 TenWings 2007-04-07 . chapter 6I loce the fic, update soon! |
 TenWings 2007-04-07 . chapter 4Bad move Akane, shes going to kick your ** YES BABY! |
 ranger5 2007-04-07 . chapter 6I love this story. Moves kinda fast, but still an excellent read. I just re-read this last week and was whining to myself that there hadn't been any updates.
Since it worked I'm whining again about how long it'll be til the next one (g).
Keep up the good work. |