Well, now that was a weird end :O

This was a sad story. One could see it as a deconstruction of the surprise party genre with an esoteric happy ending, especially since without knowlege of the crossover material, the twist at the end seems random and contrived.

It's really been quite some time since I read one of your fanfictions and most of them were on the Lost Library of Florestica site. For some reason, I don't remember seeing this particular one, which is a shame because I think this might be my favorite one.

Anyway, I absolutely love this story immensely. I'm a huge fan of both Shampoo and Nuku Nuku because they're strong female characters with perky and bubbly personalities. What you have done with them, and the way you have entwined the two together, is an absolute stroke of genius.

I have to say that I could honestly feel Shampoo's pain as she sat crying in the rain as a cat. That horrible horrible stab of abandonment, and the feeling of losing Ranma to Akane forever because if her curse. Her rock bottom was very heartfelt and I almost wanted to cry for her myself.

I'm guessing that if you decide to finish this fanfiction (God hoping you do) that it'll be a Ranma x Shampoo ending. If so, then I'm curious to see how you will smooth out all the wrongs Shampoo has done to push him away through out the canon sires. (BTW I'm a huge fan of this paring)

On a side note, there are a few things I thought would be helpful to mention. For one, your fanfictions (your Ranma ones in particular) are very hard to find for some reason. They don't seem to show up when you do a regular page to page search. I would suggest going back into all of your fanfiction settings and putting in character labels or sections. That would make it easier for people to find it. When I last looked to read Shampoo 1/2, I noticed that it wasn't under the characters Ranma and Shampoo and I couldn't find it doing a regular search.

The second thing I've noticed, is that I was a bit confused when you described Nuku Nuku's hair as Red. When I think Red I think of Ranma's girl side. So I went and looked at some pictures of Nuku Nuku just to make sure of her hair color. It's just my opinion, but she seems to have a dim magenta color. (I'm sorry if I come off as a jerk or bitchy perfectionist. Please don't get angry :( )

Anyway, If you decide to continue any of your one shots, this should be the first on your list. I mean, it's just that good.

Chapter 1

small window in her bedroom at the Nekohantan.

[Nekohanten]

Ranma was going to celebrate her birthday with her, even if it killed him.

[Points: 1]

As Shampoo exited the Nekohantan,

[Nekohanten]

wait at the Nekohantan for Mousse to show up.

[Nekohanten]

only a couple of minutes of,

[Superfluous 'of' after 'minutes']

Well, that was unusual (but interesting). When I saw that it was a one-shot I was expecting a circuitous route to Shampoo's surprise birthday party, but then the plot suddenly diverges and she's picked up by a stranger. This is clearly an introduction - there are new characters introduced and plot threads started, but there is absolutely no conclusion. There's also the common crossover problem of not enough description to truly include the people from the other series for readers not already familiar with them.

Wow - You really outdid yourself here; this is really good work.

It's also sad to see Mousse's grand plan so horribly go wrong.

That is the saddest thing I have ever read in my entire life. Poor Shampoo! T.T *goes on sobbing for an hour*

I hope this review encourages you, (im not very good at doing that), to continue a sequel. This story was a little depressing but it was very well described and I ejoyed reading it. I really, really want to know what Ranma an co. are going to do about the now missing Shampoo, this story turned out to be a very intriging one! Dont let us hanging!

this is great you should continue it!

That story was sooo cool! please write a sequal,please write one, What happens if nuku-nuku remebers who she is? How Would the other reacted to her?

Please write a sequal to this story please?

bye

0.o Oh dearie me...

Depressing... but a good start... yes indeed do continue. Could be very intriging... What will the Nerima crew do? Will Shampoo regain her memories? Will a super powered robotic Amazon save the day? Tune in for the next exciting episode?

I for one would love to see this continued, sad but

Darn it, you made me cry. I've been avoiding Ranma fanfiction like the plague for a while, but fics like this remind me of why I fell in love with it in the first place. I know I, for one, would love to see more of this, should the inclination strike you to continue. _

I really liked it! Not only is Shampoo my fave Ranma character, but you seem to make her and even cooler person inb this story! You give her more feelings, and I like that! You did a great job, please write some more!

Strange. I don't think it holds together-it's as if it were two very different stories trying to act like one. The story about Shampoo's special birthday celebration and the plot to spring it was clever and lightly amusing, with the codenames (particularly Compass) being a scream. The literally deathly car accident turned the whole mood sour, and introducing the Nuku-Nuku series just didn't make sense. We have a whole group of Ranma folks left hanging in midair, and a lifeforce minus the personality of Shampoo. Are we supposed to get any sense of closure out of this?