This isn't going to end, is it? four years is a long time, after all...

nice chapter where's 5

Please update it been too long since you updated

Отличная работа. Жжошь. Пиши ещё. (Otlichnaya rabota. Zhosh. Pishi eshe.)

I liked how you portrayed a Keitaro who's actually tired of the fact that even though Naru loves him, she is unable to stop resorting to violence whenever he makes a frickin' mistake.
Keitaro's inner conflicts when it comes to considering a relationship with a girl who's actually seven years younger than him is understandable.
I personally think that a romantic relationship between Shinobu Maehara and Keitaro Urashima would be cute (...if you ignore the age gap at least.)

chapter 3 is fine, the Story in it I like, some cleaning of the imagry perhaps, but that is it. Loved the collapse after his outburst.

Wish i had found this fic sooner, it's really good. And if people hastle you about a Kei/Shin fic, blow 'em off. They make a great couple, especialy with the setup you seem to have here. Keep up the good work

Nice plot so far. I'm more partial to Kei/Mot but I like Shinobu too. Keep up the good work.

Hm, yes, this is something I can read to pass the time =P

Good idea-focus on the Shinobu part of the story , bust as I read it i can see good oppoturnity to focus on Motoko also.

"(...)and the majority were quite pleased, especially Shinobu and Motoko (though the Samurai would never admit it)."

KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!

Naru...she just had it comming!
Finaly Keitaro was man enough to admit the truth.

KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK AND U.P.D.A.T.E!!

Hey Dave. It's Hyp. The story is pretty good. It shows promise. I don't have any stories yet. :( check in a week or so.

Heey, I like it! ^__^ Good job with this - the writing is quite excellent, regardless of what you think of Chapter 3. Well done - I'm looking forward to more of your writing!

this is a good story and i really excited for the the next chp i hope that it is almost done i want to know what happens next i think the story is just fine the way it is so keep up the good work!

poor keitaro. much cutness on shinobu's part.
and honestly... if your NOT happy with this chapter then your a better writer then most of us here cause I really liked this chapter. well later eh