I don't know why I liked this, but I did. It seems like it would fit in well if they had time to put something like it into the original game.

I'm.. I'll...
Oh hell, I'll just satisfy myself with reading this over and wishing I had your talent. Lovely, lovely fic.

It reads exactly as if this is what did happen, your words blending seamlessly with the words we heard in Defiance, and your descriptions bringing the whole scene to life. I heard it and I saw it as I read. Brilliant work!

False god!
I think that's one of Kain's stronger dialogue, liked it then, like it now.

Oh. Amazing. *applauds* Once again I cannot help but be in awe of your descriptions and characterisation...this is going straight to teh Favourites...
And so easily moving, too...Kain's abrupt sadness and guilt are overwhelming.

I, in one word, liked it.I can't wait to read the next chapter, or dare if you will.Although in this chapter it seemed to indicate that The Elder God in in leage with the Hylden, this could be true but I did not find any cleus to back this theory.

Very good.
You added somethings to the orginal dialogue without completly changing it, using lines which fitted the charaters, keeping the spirit of the game and the way of speaking of Kain and the Elder (I refuse to call it a god).
Continue, this give us a bit of your insight of the game while staying in the characters spirit

Ooh! Ooh! Woo!
I really enjoyed that! That's a hard challenge too, though you rose to the occasion magnificently ;)
As I was reading it, I could /hear/ the characters' voices in my head - which to me means that you've got the language they would use correct, and also their personalities as that's what drives the words they would be speaking. The dialogue is very, very good - it could have been lifted directly from the game itself.
Ah, wheels within wheels...