Reviews for Revealing the Past

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clara200 2005-09-13 ch 10,	abuseintreating, so Giovanni's delibird is ash's still?
clara200 2005-09-13 ch 7,	abuseooh flamkist betrayed ash! I'm glad he's going to not stand for it.
Mousewolf 2005-06-10 ch 10,	abuseHehehe...loved this.
Sailor Coruscant 2004-08-25 ch 10,	abuseThe ending seemed a little too contrived. I know that you were rushing to get to the next story, but I think you could have wrapped things up a little neater with this one. Right from the moment that Mewtwo acted against Giovani, you seemed to be racing to get the loose ends untangled, and sort of sorted out. I still liked it though.
Alex Warlorn 2004-06-10 ch 10,	abuseJust be careful, too many coincidences and 'just felt the need to be here' will make the story feel contrived. Again, Ash and Flamekist' relationship is what started this epic, and should be part of it's ending as well. (Much like Sam and Frodo's friendship in the Lord of the Rings.) A revived evil eh? So, why will it awaken now? Why couldn't be destroyed before? Will it be destroyed this time or sealed again? What will the heroes be able to do that the heroes of yester century could not that will enable them to destroy this evil? Why are the heroes selected as the ones to face this evil and not others? Will this be an evil people know about from fairy tales or something that was old when the Mews were young and long forgotten. How does Mewtwo about about It? When did Mew have a chance to tell them? Just be careful not to do something just because the reviewers tell you to and not to add characters unless they'll add to the story. (Nothing kills a story faster than character and sub plot over load.)
star's dreams 2004-06-05 ch 10,	abuseSD: Well this is a whole new devolopment but let see what going to happen.
Dragi 2004-06-04 ch 10,	abusethat was really cute. I cant wait for the sequel to find out what will happen next. good luck with your stories and the next sequel. love dragi
Alex Warlorn 2004-05-30 ch 9,	abuseIf you want to make this story into an epic this is your decision as the author. But I think that you should keep a focus on Ash and Flamkist. for when Flamekist evolved. He still held onto that?
Sapphire Wings 09 2004-05-29 ch 9,	abuseADD A NEW CHAPTER OR MAKE A SEQUIL! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! Faints due to her hyperness Friend of Yugi-Angels: She fainted again! She enjoyed your story! Caru (Her yami): When she wakes up (Bangs her head on wall) you get my point
Joanna 2004-05-29 ch 8, anon.	abuseLoving this! Really good! You're a great writer. But I tought Misty would take a little longer to forgive Ash's dad. I mean, the guy killed her parents! She should be hating the guy..Though I'm not sure if she's totally forgivin him yet. So maybe you can add some of that in. Though I know she's not the main character in this story..but still..add some Misty/Ash/Ashura tension there.. Heh, well good job on the fic! It's awesome:D Really loving it! Unofficial Pokemon/Friends fanfic reader...
Dragi 2004-05-29 ch 9,	abuseThat was really cool and exciting. please hurry up and update really soon please I cant wait to the next chapter to find out what will happen next please. and good luck with your story and the next chapter. love dragi
star's dreams 2004-05-29 ch 8,	abuseSD: What the next pokemon. And how did Mewtwo come in this story. Oh well you must have a reason to have him.
Alex Warlorn 2004-05-29 ch 8,	abuseNo offense, but as a faithful review, I have to say that adding MewTwo into the mix was a tactical error. Flamekist's evolution was a nice surprise.
Dragi 2004-05-28 ch 8,	abuseI wonder what is the next pokemon he get. please hurry up and update really soon please I cant wait to the next chapter to find out what will happen next please. and good luck with your story and the next chapter. love dragi
fyzer 2004-05-28 ch 8, anon.	abusecol.

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