What a wonderful story. You kept both Snape and Sirius in character without demonizing either of them.
Well done@

Very very in-character and well written. 2 perspectives, nice.

I am amazed by how in-character this is.
"Sirius jumped up. “That doesn’t matter!” he shouted. “Harry matters, and his friends matter! Look, Kreacher can tell Dumbledore what’s happening!”

“Kreacher?” asked Remus. “Kreacher? Sirius, Kreacher doesn’t care—”

“KREACHER!” Sirius yelled. “KREACHER, GET IN HERE!”"
Wonderful. I can't remember if any of these lines are in the book, so well have you blurred the line. (um...pardon the fairly awful pun...)
Great job!
~Ivy

I liked this - it was in character, which is the Holy Grail for me in fanfic! It was a good idea to use Draco pov for the stuff taken straight from the book, and I liked the cool quill!

I like your take on this "missing scene", especially Draco's POV was interesting, and I think that you portrayed all the characters quite well (this part make me smile: "he Slytherins prepared to cower in the face of their Head of House’s wrath, with the exception of Crabbe and Goyle, who apparently had not picked up on the sarcasm" - nice detail!)

I also liked the idea that it was actually Lupin's letter what brought Dumbledore to Number 12. Up until now I always thought that Dumbledore was expected to come for another reason, your version, however, is very believable too. All in all, I like how you depicted their waiting: the bits of conversation are excellent way of expressing their mood and thoughts without boring readers.

And lastly, the quick departure, and thus ending of your story, was very fitting.

That said, there are also three things that I wasn't comfortable with:

Firstly, when Snape contacts the Headquarters for the second time, he calls Sirius "Sirius" the first time you write about it, but it's "Black" the second time. You may want to change "Sirius" to "Black" in the first case.

Secondly, according to my reading of canon, Dumbledore knew that Snape intended to search the Forbidden Forest while the others went to the Ministry. He wouldn't know that unless Kreacher told him, therefore Snape had to inform the Order of this intention of his. Which also means that he would go to the forest instead of waiting for news.

Thirdly, I don't think that Snape wouldn't react to Sirius's calling him Snivellus, which reaction would be then interrupted by Lupin, so that they could get back to discussing Harry. Since this opinion is rather a matter of interpretaion, feel free to ignore it. :)

Thanks for the story.

well, you told me that you only thought this story and one other one was good so i decided to crit. this one.

I think some of the comments and thoughts Snape had where out of character. ex:

“Let us go, then.”- why couldn't he just say "Lets go then." it just seemed too much.

"How very sickening"- I really can't see Snape saying this.

“So, four Gryffindors took you out.”- Took you out? Do you really think Snape would say that?

Any way you get the picture.

The length was good and i liked your descriptions of the characters reactions.

However I didn't enjoy how much you took right out of the book. I realize that it was some what of a necessity to the story, but I felt as if I was rereading a chapter from OOTP instead of reading your story. I would suggest making the passages that come straight out of the book shorter, and your perspective of what happened a bit longer.

Also, some of your passages seemed like you where writing a list of what was happening in the story at that time. such as this one:

"Sirius’ dark, unkempt hair hung in is face as he hunched over the table, his face drawn. Tonks and Kingsley shot glances at each other, then bent closer to Sirius to comfort him. They were speaking mostly in low murmurs, which didn’t seem to have much of an effect on Sirius. Remus heard, “. . .good in Defence. . .”, “. . .probably nothing. . .”, and “Don’t worry. . .” He turned back to his parchment, and wrote out that there might be trouble with Death Eaters at the Ministry, that Harry and other students might be in danger, and that he should come as soon as possible. He signed it and called to the owl Dumbledore had sent with his last letter. Remus sent the letter off and turned back to the table."

I also noticed that you stopped updating this story almost a year ago. If this is one of your best stories why would you stop writing it?

Over all, I thought it was a little too much like OOTP for my enjoyment. As much as I love that book, It's almost pointless to write a story about what happened, when it was pretty obvious to the reader. ( However I did think it was clever of you to think of the quill doing that. I'm guessing you got that idea from Riddles diary?) Anyway, good luck on any more fics, you decide to write. This one is definitely not for me.

This was interesting to read. It showed the prespectives of both sides before going to the Ministry and I enjoyed it. ^.^

Sorry, but I really don't like you as a writer, reader, or reviewer. You write the most horrid flames, and only to people who have a lot of reviews on their fanfictions. It's almost like you're jealous (chuckling at the sad number of reviews you have). I hope I'm the last person to ever review any of your work. And, I didn't even make this anonymous so have a great day! (not!)

That was really good, you are a very good writer. I didn't notice any spelling mistakes and I think you portrayed the characters very well. Are you a member of Deleterius?
-Lauren

I liked how u showed what was happening at Hogwarts and then what was goin on with the Order. It helped to show all sides to that day/night. Good work!
~Moony~