i see how it is, you have time to update this but not enough time to update your buffy story (when magic collides rewritten)? haha, but seriously, this is good, you are a great writer.

This is currently the greatest pokemon story EVER. I myself am writing a poke`fic, and this is a wonderful... resource? I guess? You don't have one-sided characters, your family actualy comes up once or twice in the byline, and your pokemon... have their own personalities, well defined.

I can't wait for the next installment, and am standin g by [Impatiently xD ] For it. Because I'm not exactly patient, x)
I can't think of anything to be improved right now, but because I lik eit I'm going through your story again for kicks.

WOO!

this was really good. First Kanto story I've seen in awhile...they are constantly doing Hoenn stuff which ticks me off sometimes...too used. I like this, so you should keep writing!

GG

Hey, I only just started reading, this story is fantastic. You write the characters great, your a great author. Anyways add another chapter soon and have a great christmas.

great story

Great chapter, Will she report what happened at mnt moon to the police?

Pretty good 'fic so far, I guess. How you were using Bold to stress words and how you haven't corrected your punctuation has kind of been bothering me, but that's not incredibly important. Anyway, I hope you'll continue to get better.

Heh, Farla likes to rant about why it's a bad idea to carry an injured pokemon to the 'center, but you gave reasons for why she did it, so I guess that's okay. *shrugs*

The PPS is an interesting idea. Totodile's pretty cute, heh. ^_^

I don't really care for the references to the anime or the insertion of 'real-world' fast food chains, or how she's feeding her pokemon fast food, but whatever. The first two are a personal preference of mine, but you'd think the McCrap would make Charmander sick...

This is a great story. It's good to see something with a bit of originality, and although I was originally sceptical about including G/S pokemon so early, you've included them in a very clever way. Well done, and keep writing!

really nice story!!hope it gets better

Wyl: You are an amazing writer! dont' let anyone EVER tell you any different! you're doing a great job but if I could make a few requests... please have Taylor make Eevee a girl and constant member and PLEASE have it evolve into an Umbreon and give it a cool nickname. and please have her catch a LOT of ghost/dark type pokemon. please! keep up the good work and please update soon.^-^

ja ne

o, can u please update this. I need some inspiration for my poke fic and your fic helps me think. really it does. so please update. I want to know if they're okay.

spikestrife (to lazy to sign in)

What a great battle. Whats going to happen to them?

It was really really really good
carry on with it plz

You are an amazing writer. Although the battles were a bit bland at the beginning, you spiced them up. I really like the 'hidden gym' part. It's so original (I think). Also, not every writer can give every character their own personality (especially not me!). Keep on writing!