Nice chapter. Can't wait for the next!

Very interesting. It's simple, but that's never a bad thing. Just don't let this story seem too, shall we say, easy.

How can a backpack with so much in it be light for a ten-year-old girl?

This story is sweet! I hope you write more, cause'it's totaly awsome!

Very good story, and very few mistakes! I liked it a lot, and I hope you write more. A lot more.

Dude! this is like the best Pokemon stroy ever! can ya please get the next chapter up Soon?!