There seems to be a mistake in the second paragraph, seventh line.

"Dark black"

There's not such thing as dark black, light black, or any other difference in the shade. Sure, there is coal, blacke, jet black, etc, but I'm afriad you were repeating youself there.

Meh! I loved this. So great! You do a good job of getting across Leon's emotions. And you've kept them so well in character. You're also very descriptive. It's very pretty, I hope you do more. ^.6
~Rachel

Great stuff you've got here. You go into such depth with Leon, without losing his main motivations, his character... this is awesome. Keep it up.

Grat chapter. The fact that the Count doessn't is two indefent or careing abought ware his anamales ends up or do at times, does bother me. As does the whole useing the anamales to extract vengence/justage thing, I mean just cause two custermers sigend a contract in some cases dosen't excuese it as with the bunnies ther were just two many bystanders who had no ideal what was going on, nor did thay sine the contract.. So in the end many payed for the crime of two pepole.

Still really good. I like the idea of the in-between chapters thing. Very good, please continue soon!

This was very well-written and quite a nice concept. It will be interesting to see how you to develop the changes in the relationship in subsequent "epilogs" not to say post-mortems.

grate story keep up the good work

Augh-I just got into this and I actually found a good fanfic writer for it, and there's only one chapter! *shakes you* Write more. Your writing is poetic and skillful, and you manage to capture the characters marvelously (a skill I have never ever mastered).

Very nice. I like this. It's written very well and the story is great. Great job, please update soon!

That fic was worth it for the title alone. Even if the fic had sucked. It didn't It was far from sucking. Your descriptions are poetic, and potent, without being overdone. You explore Leon's character quite well. I'm glad you got back into this fandom. I can't wait to see more. Just a lovely job. Wonderful writing.

Oh my goodness. I cannot even begin to individually package the praise I would like to give you for this BUT. It's only the first capter, and it's in character, witty, and addictive.
Write. More. ;_;