This is a fascinating and fabulous fic set up. What would Tortall be like without Daine? And Carthak--what would happen there? I have this odd feeling that if you do continue it, Kally, might play a part.

I really like the way you play out the conflicts and plotlines, and I hope you'll consider continuing the story someday.

Oh, just wow. Fantastic plot line! I'm really enjoying this - your writing and imagery is just amazing, really. I have to say, I'm wondering whether Daine is going to appear somewhere along the way, or whether she'll stay as the 'Maiden Huntress'... It also makes me wonder whether you've let her be killed off in the bandit attack, which would definitely make things more interesting.
You've written Jon's grief and Thayet's bravery wonderfully, and the children's. Your interaction's between Numair and Rikash are just fantastic aswell, and I love Tait having to adjust to actually co-operating with the wolves!
I'd say one thing - maybe use the dividers between each section, to make reading easier. But having said that, I couldn't get them to work earlier, and each to their own anyway.
I'm looking forward to more! :) Thanks!

This is awesome, and I definitely hope the upcoming chapters come up faster than 2 years in between :D
I'm really glad you picked it up again though

Hey. Let me just start by telling you how much I enjoyed this fanfiction. It's very well written and interesting. Really the only thing you need is some sort of parition between scene changes.

"Maiden Huntress", eh? I like it!

"I can dress myself!" / "Yet you choose not to. I wonder why." *adores*

Excellent chapter! I am immensely eager to read the next one.

daine. it all happened because daine never came. this is a brilliant au. i love it. please update, quick!

Are you gonna continue?Please do!

you paint a future so bleak i'm afraid of reading on. is our favorite girl going to enter the picture later? i so love her and her wild abilities. ^_~. and i hope you don't kill the characters. that would be sad. but excellent writing. everyone was in character and everything.

I really like alternate universe stories and this one is great. You have a very advanced writing style that makes your story all that more fun to read. Also, the plot line is intriguing and ends at a bit of a cliffhanger. Please update so I can find out what happens. One last thing, does the beginning of the story take place around the time of Wild Magic just without Diane? It was kind of hard to tell. But anyway, very good!

Very good. I like your notion of how things might have been without Daine. Only I am wondering, how did Numair then survive? He was saved by Daine. Oh well, I am nit-picking too much. A very well-written and intriguing story, I can't wait for more of it. One typo that stood out to me, though, was when Alanna is in the woods, and it said "surrethemselves."

Re-uploaded the chapter sans annoying typos and missing words. Note to self: MS Word '97 sucks at converting documents to HTML.

Ungh.
Currently too jealous to construct my thoughts into a coherant manner, but I wanted to try anyway.
Firstly, it's a refreshingly original plot, something I've never even considered, but which you made totally plausible. I also love how you get much more out of how the others reacted to the Swoop attack.
Roald comforting his sister was lovely. I adored the interaction between the two, and their reaction at finding themselves in Ozorne's palace. I was a little upset that Roald was taken out of it so quickly - are you planning to have him return?
Ozorne (SQUEE!) portrayal is wonderful.
One small critique - maybe consider having a greater variation in paragraph length? True, lots of short paragraphs lends a quick fire impression to the answers given, but a little more description in some areas would have been nice.
Really, really interested in what you've got in store.

I know I commented on the Dove but I felt like dropping a review here...
This is lovely! I was totally absorbed in reading this and the story moves with a good pace. So far, it seems to fill the requirements of an epic, long speeches *Jon*, supernatural *magic and Mithros*, battles, extraordinary characters involved in the plot and so forth... I love the twists! I can't wait for the next chapter now!

When I started reading this, I was a little jarred by the aprupt scene changes, and the general pace of the story. But halfway through I realized that the charm & impact of the fic itself resides in that abruptness--an abruptness that is very well suited to your writing style and your general personality. (I do mean this as a compliment, for the record.)
You've captured the flavors of the characters exquisitely, Lea. I'm most impressed with Thayet (of course) and Jonathan - I didn't know I was still able to feel such pain concerning his situation. But his realization that Liam had Thayet's eyes made my heart constrict, and every scene following that with Jon really crushed me.
I'm also astounded at your ability to keep such a reconcilable mood for Tortall. In fact, this mood matches more with SotL--which makes me think that the changes in Tortall as Tammy wrote them are hugely due to Daine... a thought I'd never entertained until now. Prince Roald is a delight to read, and I like Kally's willfulness.
You've given me a lot to think about--and I LOVE that.

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