0.0 So sad...

What? It makes perfect sense! It's REALLY good, too!

Luv this poem so much

Luv you poems carry on writing, pls read mine thanx

~Naomi~

I wouldn't call it "not good". There are certainly some much worse ones out there. It seems like she's just talking, or thinking. And thoughts don't always have to make sense. Maybe for the last line you could put something like. "I was to be his sheath, and yet he became mine" Or something so it doesn't sound as redundant. But then who am I to give advice? I'd prolly make it worse, lol.

It's not bad! It's freeverse, and yes, maybe a little sloppy, but it really gets the message accross and I love the format with the itallics and everything. ^.^
~Usashi

This ain't "NOT good" i like it, i think you are a good poet!