That is an amazing story

This was very interesting to read..another point of view on what Jesus did for us. Great job here!

WOW! This is my new favorite story.

This is a very good story. I loved the soldier's pov

POWERFUL!

Deep man, deep.

*sits back in chair dumbstricken* umm...Wow? Oh my goodness, this was one of the most descriptive, poetic things I have ever read! Congradulations on your wonderful story!

Sisters in Christ,

Mia LeighArc

...wow. I love how you didn't shirk one bit on the graphic nature of the whipping. That's how it happened...and you didn't skip it. Wonderful job. You're an amazing writer. What inspired you to write this? (Jesus' death, obviously...but why from the Soldiers' perspective?) Just curious.

Most beautifully writen. That's my 2 cents.

It takes a bit to make a cynical old atheist like me enjoy a Bible story... but you've pulled it off in that this convinces as the thoughts of a real human being. Well done.

just wonderful ... trully amazing tale! i've never looked at it from that point of view.

Beautiful...Absolutely beautiful.

*The Mighty Sisto*

Ohhh, that was simply stunning! I love how you show the transition of his thoughts from "It's just my job" to "What have I done?" I agree w/Ultimaga-you should write a part where Jesus visits the soldier.

Hey that is a sweet fic, how about you add on a part where Jesus comes to the solider after Jesus dies

I liked the continued repeating of the line "It's my job", and on the third time of writing it, you placed three periods after the last word, perhaps to signify his growing unease at what he was doing. Perhaps at this point he knew something was not normal, perhaps not. The imagery in this line is wonderful: "His flesh hung in ribbons. Blood streamed to the ground." It gives the reader a clear picture of the torture that Jesus had to go through. I also liked the nice touch of the soldier being confused by the fact that Jesus was asking His Father to forgive the people who had hurt him, because they were ignorant. If I could suggest a continuation, perhaps you should write about how the soldier, on the brink of despair, confronts God in prayer about what he has done, to come to terms with it. Great job :)