o...this is getting interesting...^-^

very nice plot- brilliant wording, loved the metaphores very nice touch, although i must say the last line was a bit of a dissapointment- a bit too brash for the context- you have great way of convaying emotions without stating what they are- but in those cases tone it down a bit i think it'll really help your riting- but i do love it i mean hermione definately has to end up with draco we all know it it's too much of a perfect set up plez hav her end up with draco- let ron find sum otha slip to run after way to much steemy tension between malfoy and granger play on that- but nothing too drastic (when it gets so over the top it's ruined ;-) update soon! VERY SOON! i must find out what happens
-Cheers

oh, poor hermy

hey this is so good! the proludge thing (sorry cant spell!) was so good im totally hooked! I want more! please?
loadsalove
M-W
x-x-x-x

Amazing story! soo good!!