This is indeed more beautiful than the original version of Trinity's death. If only it were as dramatic in the movie... That would have been very moving. *nods* Then again, I got emotional during the movie anyway.

A beautiful re-write. I love this MUCH better than the movie's ending to Trinity. Well done. You're right Dislogue is overrated.

wow, Now THIS is truly excellent. It brought me to tears, beatifully written. I now find myself wishing this was the actual death sceane of Trinity. Although we were all crying through out the sceane, you coun't help but notice the corny-ness (is that even an word?!) Of it all, the whole "Kiss me once one more time, kiss me"
*Tears well up* Don't laugh at me (lol)
Well done, *Pats you on back* Perfect.
Now I must go and read more of your work.
Naz x

yes, yes, must agree...lol, quite unfortunately true.

Beautiful.
~DM