Oh no! Now that Lemony loves his brother-in that way-what will become of him and Beatrice?! Hehe, that was funny, wrong, very wrong (I never knew Lemony was into incest), but laughter wins. "Lemony felt sort of scared. The blackness of his surroundings. His brother loving him. He was trapped." is a great line (are great lines) and you're a great writer.

um... i don't usually like slash... well, i really don't like slash... but goodie! it's well-written, even though i don't like the ship, it's good

Wow, I loved the beginnig but the last paragraph was a little exagerated. If I understand correctly, Lemony and Jacques are in love but Lemony likes Beatrice? It's a bit confusing but if not for that, this was great.
~Chemnashaovirodaintrachivu