ok... i really did enjoy the storyline, it was different than everything I've already read and thats great. i liked the plot and how it was carried out. i just suggest having an editor help with your word mishaps and with the structure. all in all i give you props.

um yeah i had little to follow and i had to keep re-reading to understand what i was reading in the first place

u need a spell check or a second reader to help with your writing. its very confusing

there are too many loop holes and i cant even follow half of what they are saying. it jumps and skips important parts. its hard to see where you leave off to where you begin because its all mushed together.

me likey hun!

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

I must say I've never read a fanfic with a story line like that before. I really liked it, it was dfferent and twisted. I think you could have done more with it, but hey, to each his own. All in all, it was a great fanfic.

"The truth of the matter is that you always know the right thing to do.The hard part is doing it."

- Gen. H. Norman Schwarzkopf


Guess what...you did the right thing writing this frickin good story!!


c ya boo boo!

That is so cute.

I liked your story, it had an original twist to it! :)

KAWAII!

wow it got better as i went i luv it so much hehe great job^_^ ^_~ -_~

that was great i luv it

It's good story with good plot. But it has one big minus - grammatical errors -> mainly confusion him/her, I can't remember anything else. You know, almost everyone told me that no matter how good story I write if I make too many errors in grammar. Be wary about it and I'm sure that I will write only accomplishments next time;)

That was sweet. yes write a sequel please...