 Scritch 2004-04-17 . chapter 1Thank you for reviewing my story - I decided to answer you back! This was very well done, and I much enjoyed the angst in it, though it seemed a little shaky, more like you were writing and seeing the words but not really feeling them. This is just my interpretation at this moment, and I'm horribly tired, so perhaps thats just me and you were putting everything into it. In any case, if you really wanted to make this look better as well, I would suggest that you change the formatting. Put the song lyrics into italics, with maybe an extra blank line before and after the verses, so as to show more gap and therefore time difference. Just a suggestion. I quite enjoyed this! |