its great keep going

lol...the chugging was cute. but why isn't the story longer. i need more, more...anyways. Ben is my favorite character. i saw draco. thank you lots, and i hope you update soon.

Chugging salt, what! what! told ya it was a godd thing to use!! very funny

first, this is constructive, not carping. you have good ideas, even though you know i am "draco-centric". but, something that takes away from your story is your grammar and syntax. i think many more people would be interested if you paid more attention to your grammatical errors. also, try to diversify (yes it is a word) your sentences; add more detail. that's just my opinion on what i like in fics. it feels as if bam bam bam. i'm not being given real invite or look into your world, dare i say. i feel like i'm just there. i want to be pulled in, but i'll give you time for that one. i know this was long, however i hope it helps.

hey, r u thinking of putting Malfoy in too? And i think you should really think about the relationships between each of the character:
-r ron,harry,+herm going to be best buds or...
and how far r u thinking to write, a lot ot medium or nothing

oh, i realized u sent me a review, thanks and my next chapter is posted.

padfoot

Well you could um...have the ppls get to school and then be sorted!! well I love the story. -Squirt

hey this is a great story.. i loved it the words just made me want read more keep on ryting.. love Kirstie

I like this chapter. It is good chapter. update soon. So what now.