WTF?/ your chapter was literally 9 sentences long. Just 1 fricken paragraph! Ok this story is SOFA king retarded! It has absolutely NO substance whatsoever, and it is VERY poorly written, as if a first grader who is writing there very first story is written, and the characters are OOC. I hope you next chapter actually has THOUGHT put into it. then it could be 10 times better ((but the plot is still retarded, so it couldn't be much better))

nice errm...you call this a chapter? more like a few sentences thrown together to me. anyways I don't have much to say, cuz there's not enough to talk about. One thing, you need to make your chapters longer. WAY longer. WAY WAY longer. about 5 times that size. Its not too difficult trust me. And they need WAY more substance. your chapters just have no substance. but yeah that's all I have to say for now.

Oh my gosh, Oh my gosh... That was... That was... AMAZING! I love it! PLEASE, write more and more and more.

-Kiersten

It starting out to be an intresting story. Keep writing I went to see what happens.

I already gave you one of these review things but hers the second...*Cough cough* ROCK ON DUDE!! There you go HAVE A SPLENDID TIME!

this sounds like it will be intresting, plus im a total hermione/ron shipper so im hoping you'll write more chapters soon (and i hope there longer)sorrey...
-brit

that was...GREAT! LOVED IT! DEFINENTLY KEP WRITING!

you might want to spellcheck.
but it IS cute. eating...something...slowly...
curse is interesting, but you might want to space that out too so people will catch the rhyming.