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| disposablehero 2006-08-26 ch 1,  | abuseA lemonade stand? What the **? I can't believe you fic'ed. Wow. *kills you* |
| Mariphasa Hecatene 2006-05-21 ch 3, | abuseHey, I love this! (Is it really your first fic? Wow.) Nice and spare, great in-character dialogue, paced well, fun to read. I'm glad there are multiple chapters; I'll be looking out for more. =) |
| Lady Razorsharp 2005-12-08 ch 3, | abuseI know from your site that you said you lost interest in this, but what's here is fabulous. You've handled the relationship between the members of this unlikely crew with just the right touch, and made me remember that they really don't like each other all that much...*g* Bravo. If you continue someday, I'll be here with bells on. |
| cowgirlnoir 2004-08-31 ch 3, | abuseThe best thing about this chapter is I want more. Kudos on the knowledge of Afrikaans and the lingo of "solarside." I really love the character of Charlie and look forward to his drinking with Jet. The ending scenes felt more like brief impressions, but this from the perspective of someone who wants to read more is not totally credible. |
| cowgirlnoir 2004-08-31 ch 2, | abuseSly thing, making a Breughel descendant an Afrikaaner cop on Venus! And of course New Kimberely still has the diamonds. Ed is super in this installment, as is Faye watching Spike. |
| cowgirlnoir 2004-08-31 ch 1, | abuseGood set-up. I like the sense of routine as Spike comes in bleeding and Jet goes to get the medikit. The way you write Jet asking how bad it is is a lovely little touch. The discussion about the hired muscle is also interesting, although it feels a little well-oiled at times, as if Faye and Jet know Spike's answers. In sum, I'll repeat Faye: we should send you out on these jobs more often. |
| Princess Brimstone 2004-04-24 ch 2, anon. | abuseOOH! I likey! please continue! |