A fascinating interpretation of the relationship between Sun and Moon, but also a beautifully written piece of poetry. Well done!

"Least thou be burnt to cinder"

Shouldn't that be "lest?"

"The Moon agreeing to keep his distant"

I think you mean "distance."

Enough nitpicking. I've never seen a piece about Tilion and Arien before, so this is very different, and I love how you wove Maglor into it. A fitting way to redeem himself.

Very nice! I like how you used the sun goddess myth.

Ohh, I like! Maglor earned his redemption by singing the Sun from her hiding place. Very pretty, and fine task for the Mighty Singer.

Oh; this is lovely! I usually don't care for LOTR verse, or LOTR-inspired verse, but this is resonant and mythical.