I liked it so far, will you continue?

Damn... that's harsh stuff. Jack tryna hit on Marlene and now starts a fight with Ralph... I wanna see more update soon

wo! good starting, continue!

AHAHAHAHAHHAHAHHAHAH! So funny 'LORD OF THE FLIES' heheh...Piggster! oH yeah and in the end *smirk* u spelled fight wrong...you said flight! HHeheheheh...Sorry bout that really just had to tell you! But funny stuff...You should have put the stuff that was on ur script for the english presentation...ur edited version!! arite cya

It's not fair. This isn't a slash story. But you undoubtedly know that Ralph and Jack are made for eachother no matter what anybody else says.

Hey, your story isn't bad, it just seems a little bit unrealistic considering that the story took place sometime in the 1950's or before. Four years later would be no later than the 60's, which would make the slang you used pretty unreasonable. Also, the story doesn't really go anywhere, it just kind of says that they boys walked to school, Ralph saw Jack, and they got in a fight. Not a bad piece of writing, but not the best I've ever seen.