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| VenomLord 2008-01-21 ch 1, | abuseSorry it took me so long to finally get around to reading this. I can see the influence of several different shows in this. Not really a bad thing though, since it adds a little more flavor to the story. New angel designs and new deuses should help to shake up the world of Angelic Layer. I wish I could think of more to say, but I hardly think I'm qualified to comment on grammer, punctuation, and such. |
| xxsecretwriterxx 2004-06-28 ch 1, | abuseInteresting...Its well written as well! ~Angel |
| Talisman of Light 2004-06-12 ch 1, | abuseVery very good so far. Your battle scenes show great promise. Update soon! |
| Shutsumon 2004-04-30 ch 1, | abuseOkay review as promised. Firstly typo notification "It had been a strange Saturday. After classed were done, Hikaru was on her way home with her friends..." typo one shouldn't that be classes. mistake Misaki is character right Hikaru is her angel ne? Most of the stuff I told you before still stands. Commander Dragon is one weird guy. Culpepper is obviously techno-savvy. The guys at the end are a bit creepy what with mechanical bats and a glasses of red liquid... The fight was cool. Since I don't know A.L I can't really comment on the characterisation of the canon characters. Get on with the main story you've made me want to read more and that's the point of a story (but don't neglect ccu to do it :p) |
| DayDreamer9 2004-04-29 ch 1, | abuseCOOL! I loved it! Who were those people who sounded bad at the end? Will Misaki and Hikaru enter the World Championship? This is great, please update soon :) |
| Heekun 2004-04-29 ch 1, anon. | abuseLiked it the first time I read it, and I liked it still after the seconmd time. :) |
| Li'ain 2004-04-29 ch 1, anon. | abuseLoved thi.Please write more |
| Shatterstorm 2004-04-29 ch 1, anon. | abuseGood work. I hope you will write more. |