Damn... that's funny **. Seriously, I really liked it. Keep on writing (preferrably not about Sailor Moon or that suck-** game Arc the Lad).

Hey, nice fanfic so far. One problem. ExcelSaga takes place in the city of F, not X. You're only 18 letters off, so don't let it get to you. But hey, no es importante. Your story rocks, and I luvz Jay and Silent Bob.

The chapters are getting longer and that makes me happy! Oh yeah, nice story (still).

I like the story so far... Poor Hyatt! ::sniffs, then laughs:: Hehe talcum powder...

Good chapter, and it was a nice length too. LOL, drugs and Public Security work shouldn't be mixed...

Good story, and this chapter was a bit longer than the previous one! Yayies! Hehe, Yomiko falling for Hyatt killed me! ::dies::

Good (again), and short (again). I noticed a dropped word or two, but that's no big deal...

Why am I reviewing every chapter? Well, the short answer is this: I'm bored. So, onward and upward! Or something...

Good, but short... Sentence flow is all better this chappie... And that's it...

Okay, so far, overall story is good! Some of the sentences had poor flow, but that's okay. I'd suggest reading over the story, maybe out loud, before posting to help with the sentence flow... or find a beta reader. Of course that's all moot now, since you've already finished with this story...

0_0 I just noticed... We both have the last name "Darkstorm"... Well, both our pennames do, anyway...

I have decided to reveiw every chapter, as opposed to just the last one! Yay me!

Anyhoo, cool first chappie, and your spelling seemed fine... but I wasn't really looking for spelling errors. Keep up the writing, you're pretty good!

Hey dude, Dark Yasha here!

Just reviewing to tell you how much Dark Yasha loved your story and Dark Yasha loves talking in third person as well, Why? Well frankly Dark Yasha is confused as you are! Anyway kick ** story and hope you make other ones that kick as much (If not preferably more) **!

Great ending. Its also intresting that you put the ending of the origional RoD movie in to this.

funny end to the chapter.

Heheheheheh funny... as usual! I agree with u on changing the rating! & now sumthing 2 make u laugh...I watched my kaworu episode of Evangelion &...I vried...alot. Kira had 2 comfort me...WAH! I love Shioji & Kaworu! Peace out! (Dr. Mguni is in my college...NO! 2day I had a 2 hour IT lesson...wivout computers!) BYE! xxPs Go on those sites i sent u! Pps I wonder wot website Shioji was denied acces 2? *raised eyebrows!* He is not a paedophile damnit! He is just...effeminite!!

funny chapter.