Reviews for The Beginning of the End

sanoske123 2004-06-03 ch 1,	abusegreat story. It kinda makes you think: "could this really happen?" the scary thing is, it probably could. And yes, you were right i have never heard of this series, and yes, i did like it laughs.but all-in-all, very well written and thought provoking.
Lakewood 2004-05-20 ch 1,	abuseThis story has a lot of potential. I like how your premise sets up the entire foundation for the rest of the story. I can think of a thousand possible ways that this story could be great, but likewise, I can think of just as many ways that it could take the opposite track. Be careful on how you take this story. Dialogue should be broken up into seperate paragraphs when there is a new speaker. Also, make sure your chapters aren't as short as the premise; readers take disdain to short chapters. I think that this could end up being a very good story. Keep up the good work.
dave-d 2004-05-01 ch 1,	abuseVery interesting premise. NOTE: it would certainly help the reader if you could separate out the different speakers. The writing runs all together. Spaces between each speaker's words and the following speaker's words might make a world of difference...