Hmm. This is going to be one of my rare actual, if not unspecific, reviews and I hope you don't dismiss it.

You have a beautiful overall story line. However, the issue is your organization. Certain plots are too long, too interrupted, or too short. This goes for certain details as well. There is too much telling. Perhaps you should have indulged in some parts of the story instead of just moving it along. Do you get what I mean?

It is great that you do not have a happy ending, but I believe that most of your readers had been waiting for Harry and Snape to reunite, even since the very first chapter. Also, there is too much about the lives of people who did not play a part in the majority of the story. Perhaps you wished to establish a sense of two different worlds in order to aid in your ending but it could have been shortened a little since the readers would probably still left hanging off a cliff from the end of the second to last chapter (pre-epilogue) to the very last few lines.

On a more personal level: I really was looking forward to see Harry trying to repair twenty years of separation (to Snape) and the discovery of his identity (since that is implied by the prologue) as well as him interacting with Dumbledore with "the camaraderie of old veterans."

As I said, you have an excellent overall story line. It is saddening that you did not choose to use it more fully. Although having too many interesting plots would be a disaster, the scar could have come into play as a more important role.

If you ever wish to, please do reuse this idea. I am certain that you would be able to write an excellent piece.

If you wish to review over your story again, please remember these things unless personal preference is what caused you to ignore them:
1) A main course of lobster would require the wine to be white wine.
2) Champagne would never be drunk along with a meal but always as a companion to social chats.
3) Champagne would not be poured in a wine glass.
4) The men dining would never be allowed to remove the cover from their own meals. Instead, they would all be removed at the exact same moment with one waiter by each dish unless there is no cover at all.

This is just getting better and better!

Fave..story...EVER! S**t this is good stuff!

I rarely review, but when I read your A/N's at the end ("knowing that I have touched someone somewhere with the words I've written is tremendously gratifying"), I had to review.

You touched me deeply. It was an amazing and mesmerizing story, and though I wished for a happy ending (maybe in the sequel?), I'm glad that you ended it this way.

I found the subtle lines about Ron extremely beautiful. Ron is a loyal friend (the stories in which Ron betrays Harry annoy me a lot) and you kept that loyalty. I also 'enjoyed' (it's bitter-sweet) how Hermione became "everybody and nobody’s friend". Very... realistic. Though I did not like how you portrayed Dumbledore (I'm not a fan of manipulative Dumbledore, but that's just my humble opinion!), you portrayed the other characters well and you gave them fitting, realistic fates.

And I thank you for not making a Gary-Sue out of Harry! This is the first Time Travel fic that was about a real Harry!

All in all, you made me feel like I was on a roller-coaster (which I usually only experience with real books), and you portrayed the destruction of the war(s) very realistically and with beautiful sentences.

Thank you :]

wow. this story was really good. one of the best stories ive ever read. i just wish it could have had a happy ending (but i know its angst so thankfully i didnt get my hopes up to much). i literally CRIED when i finished this story. its just so wonderful and sad and its ended, and i wanna read more of it! which is very unusual for me, cause when i finish stories this long im usually bored by the end. not in this one though, i want to read more of this fantastic work of wonderfulness only to be sad that it has ended. ur a great writer. this story is one of my favorites of all time.

ahh!
MUST
READ
SEQUEL!

usually my review are longer than this, but i really want to see what happens.

that was really good, and there was only one little logic blip that i could find, and i cannot even remember what it was now.

9/10.

harry: "sleep with me?" that line was SO suggestive. lmao. i was laughing. this is a really good story. i love it a whole lot. ur awesome for coming up with this.

wow. this was a long, but really good chapter. i cant wait to see what happens from the duel.

i love ur story. its really good. im not usually that into harry/snape fics but this one is really good. and i couldnt help but notice that snape called harry by his first name instead of last.

wow. this is really interesting so far. i really like it ^_^.

A very compelling read! Thank you for an awesome story.

This story is really interesting, one of the best time travels I've ever read.

Hello! =)

I was reading your fiction, translated in French, but I was so (too much) impatient to read the sequel. I stopped (in French) when James challenged Harry to the duel (as the translation is not complete)! =)
By the way, Harry's terms (especially the one about faithful to Lily) were amazingly funny! ^^ He is helping his parents to date, how kind it is! :p

I just wanted to tell you that I love your story. I love the way that Severus and Harry/Jonathan are acting, that they are more than friends ^^... I also love Lily! =)

I will not read all your story tonight because I am very tired (it is about 1.30 AM in France ^^)...

I am very sorry, but I don't speak English very well, I may make mistakes. Hope it is (still) understandable!

Bye!

So...to be honest I wasn't sure about this story to begin with. I'm not a fan of slash but the summary was too interesting to look away. I completely fell in love with this plot, the characters, and the story as a whole. There were a few mistakes (like Malfoy being stated earlier that he was older and then later him being in Harry and Snape's Potions class) but nothing that really detracted from the story.

I applaud you for a wonderful job.

“Sleep with me?” ... that's just... really... such wonderfully easy to misunderstand words...

boy~~